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Mystery Trainer
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Ok just to make it clear this is not a pokemon story XD its a strory that i am currently working on and i would aprreciate if you guys could give me your opinion.I know my grammar is terrible but ill correct as much as i can srry.
TALES OF THE OUTCASTED
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This is some kind of short resume of the story i woulld like to hear your opinion about the concept before posting more XD
TALES OF THE OUTCASTED
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When the earth was created, Demons, Angels and Humans fought each other for survival as they could not live together.
One man who stood for them all created 3 worlds, one for each species: Heaven for the angels, Hell for the Demons and the Human kept the earth.
The world was finally at peace but when the hero created the 3 world he added 4th one in order to seal the sacred sword he used to create the worlds. No one ever knew the existence of the 4th world but they knew all about the other worlds.
As the hero could not let a species have the sword he created a new one, the people of the 4th Realm were not Humans, Angels or Demons.
Because of the hero this 4 specie was stuck in a world separated from other. A world where the suns never reach, a world engulfed in forever darkness.
As time passed, their hatred over Humans, Demons and Angels grew more and more. They decided to unlock the sacred sword used to make the 3 world.
Their plan was to erase everything and make a new world only for them. They trained 7 mages in the ancient art of magic, each of them for one Element, and waited for the right time to strike.
When the mages were finished their training they gained power equal to that of a god. The only thing keeping them for having the sword was to break the seal the hero made on it.
To do so they needed to break the balance of the world. The first part of their plan was to seal the King of Demons and make it pass as the Angel's doing.
With the 7 mages new power, they opened a gate to Hell but reaching the king was another story. Outsiders were not allowed in the king's castle.
The 7 mages had to make their way through.
The 7 mages worn out by their many battles, sped into the domain and sealed the king and his lackeys away, leading their plan to the next level.
Meanwhile, a little place away from here, the Demon King's son was about to get his demon powers. This day was the prince ritual day.
The Queen was about to finish the ritual when they heard a giant cry coming from the castle. She pause the ritual and told to her son to wait here.
As time passed, the Queen did not return to finish the ritual. (The demon son) and the (the guide) went to look for her.
When they entered the castle they saw the Queen laying down on the ground dead and no trace of the culprit.
The guide looked at the demon prince and told him:
"This is not something you should have seen, forgive me my lord, this is for your own good.
The young prince cried a single tear of blood before noticing that the room was covered in black smoke emanating from the guide and then he woke up near a beach whit every last of his memory erased.
At that time the demon general had already declared open war against the Angels.
One man who stood for them all created 3 worlds, one for each species: Heaven for the angels, Hell for the Demons and the Human kept the earth.
The world was finally at peace but when the hero created the 3 world he added 4th one in order to seal the sacred sword he used to create the worlds. No one ever knew the existence of the 4th world but they knew all about the other worlds.
As the hero could not let a species have the sword he created a new one, the people of the 4th Realm were not Humans, Angels or Demons.
Because of the hero this 4 specie was stuck in a world separated from other. A world where the suns never reach, a world engulfed in forever darkness.
As time passed, their hatred over Humans, Demons and Angels grew more and more. They decided to unlock the sacred sword used to make the 3 world.
Their plan was to erase everything and make a new world only for them. They trained 7 mages in the ancient art of magic, each of them for one Element, and waited for the right time to strike.
When the mages were finished their training they gained power equal to that of a god. The only thing keeping them for having the sword was to break the seal the hero made on it.
To do so they needed to break the balance of the world. The first part of their plan was to seal the King of Demons and make it pass as the Angel's doing.
With the 7 mages new power, they opened a gate to Hell but reaching the king was another story. Outsiders were not allowed in the king's castle.
The 7 mages had to make their way through.
The 7 mages worn out by their many battles, sped into the domain and sealed the king and his lackeys away, leading their plan to the next level.
Meanwhile, a little place away from here, the Demon King's son was about to get his demon powers. This day was the prince ritual day.
The Queen was about to finish the ritual when they heard a giant cry coming from the castle. She pause the ritual and told to her son to wait here.
As time passed, the Queen did not return to finish the ritual. (The demon son) and the (the guide) went to look for her.
When they entered the castle they saw the Queen laying down on the ground dead and no trace of the culprit.
The guide looked at the demon prince and told him:
"This is not something you should have seen, forgive me my lord, this is for your own good.
The young prince cried a single tear of blood before noticing that the room was covered in black smoke emanating from the guide and then he woke up near a beach whit every last of his memory erased.
At that time the demon general had already declared open war against the Angels.
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This is some kind of short resume of the story i woulld like to hear your opinion about the concept before posting more XD