The Deepest Place

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    ..because I realized that it does take you to a very deep place.



    The Deepest Place


    Caught in a pattern of soft, sunset light
    But still falling into utter despair
    She listens to the voices of anger
    And the explosions upon the stair

    Her heart is pulled dangerously downward
    Drenched in a puddle of tears
    She stands there, cold and alone
    Though two of her family are near

    Hate and fear
    And fear and hate
    Distract all thoughts
    Dominate



    She longs for harmony and care



    Much later comes mumbled apologies
    Hugs and regretful stares
    And all the usual attempts
    To bring comfort and repair

    They have no idea of the damage they caused
    In their fit of disgusting madness
    They have no idea that she was trapped

    In the deepest pits of sadness
     
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    t-t beautiful.
    I love the stanzas. (I think that's the term, I'm no professional poet...)

    I love the title though, and the whole idea.
    Because dang, I can relate... in a sense.

    Nice poem, it's just so darn sad! You're writing is beauful though.
     
    =D

    Aw, thanks for that!! ^^ Nice to know that someone
    actually appreciated my writing.. got kinda scared
    that it turned out too emo. xD

    Hey, maybe I'll come back and post happier
    poems.. if my dang school allows..
     
    Wow, that's was beautiful! The words you chose to describe everything and the flow/rhythm was great. It's a very powerful piece, and very very sad. Readers can really feel the pain of the girl when reading it. It's wonderfully done! =)
     
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