The Escape!

[Phurret]

Hey guys, here's Chapter 1 of "The Escape"
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The Escape
Chapter 1: A Mewtwo?

Ash was an ordinary teenage boy, who liked to earn a little extra cash, and was a Pokemon Trainer. Ash has beaten the Pokemon League well over 20 times, and is concidered "The Champion." Don't be mistaken though, I'd believe somebody if they told me, that he could be beaten.

It all started, when Ash was folding his new underwear that his mom "happened" to buy with little pink teddy bears on them. As he was folding, one by one, two by two... He heard a rustle outside, in the bushes. Just as he look out hit window, BOO! Ash's "rival/friend" Gary, scared Ash so much, that Ash was on the other side of the room, with an extra-small pair of underwear on his head.

"Mommy wommy got you some new diapies?" Said Gary in an untollerable voice.

"Hey, Shut up!"

"Did'ya hear 'bout the conference?" Asked Gary.

"Hmm? Conference? THE CONFERENCE! THE ANNUAL POKEMON CONFERENCE!" Exclaimed Ash.

"Yup! It's tomorrow!"

"Horray!" Yelled Ash at the top of his voice.

---Meanwhile at Giovanni's Head Quarters.---

"*Yawn and Stretch* Today, I will make MY Mewtwo ALL POWERFUL! Eahahhah!" Thought Giovanni.

Giovanni walked down the 12 case stairs, through the 3000 sq. ft. Dining Room, and down into his lab.

"AHHHHHGAHHHH!!! %#*#&&#$*!@$*@! Mewtwo!"

Mewtwo had gone. as Giovanni looked around, Mewtwo's captule was destroyed. All of Giovanni's equiptment was destroyed. There was one more thing that was destroyed though.

"The window. He went out the window!" Said Giovanni

---Meanwhile at Ash's House---

"I never would have thought it would be today!" Exclaimed Ash.

"Neither would I, except for the fact that I wake up before 10:30! So I caught it on TV you dumbell!" Said Gary.

"Whatever! I think we should go train, you know, for the conference!" Said Ash.

The conference is a BIG building, in which on a certain day in a year, all trainers from around the country battle each other randomly.

"Let's go!" Said Ash in an outgoing mood!

"BRRIINNG, BRRIINNG... BRRIINNG, BRRIINNG..."

"That's the phone, I'll be right back!" Said Ash as he ran out his door.

"Yeah, Uhuh, NO! Really? Well... I can't... The conference is tomorrow! Well, if it's that important! Ok! Bye!" Ash said as he hung up.

"I can't come to the conference."

"WHAT!? Why?" Questioned Gary.

"Prof. Oak sent me off to Prof. Ivy's lab. She's expecting me tomorrow! Oak said it's EXTREMELY important."

TO BE CONTINUED!

 

[Phurret]

Hey guys, here's Chapter 2 of "The Escape"
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The Escape
Chapter 2: Furret Mumbo!

"See ya Ash! I'm out to the conference!" Yelled Gary as he ran shuffling out the door.

"Hmm... Now, who can come with me? I know! Misty and Brock, maybe I can visit them! Yeah! Boy, will they

be surprised or what?"

"Ash honey, are you talking to yourself again? You know that's not healthy!" Said Ash's mother.

Ash now sets off to his good friends in Cerulean and Pewter. Misty is visiting th Cerulean Gym, and

Brock, the Pewter Gym.

"Ash honey, I got you a new pair of shoes, since you need to get to three places in one day, I want you

to have these "Running Shoes" your old ones are scuffed up anyway!" Said Ash's mom

"Aw, thanks a bunch mom! And I certainly won't forget to change my underwear!"

*Two minutes of laughing.*

"Bye mom! I'll be back tomorrow with something that Prof. Ivy needs to give me! Prof. Oak says it's

really important!"

"See ya honey!"

Ash now sets off through his dusty path, and out on the the cool, crisp grass, where Pokemon and

adventures alie!

"Ugh... I've been walking for 20 minutes! I know! I'll talk to Pikachu!"

"Pika..."

"Oh yeah, you can hear me! Heha..." Said Ash

"Pika Pika Chuuuuuu..."

"I see, well have you talked to him?" Asked Ash.

"Pi Pika Pi Pikachu! Chu Chu Pika!" Exclaimed Pikachu

"What a horrible thing to say! Leave me out of it! Oh! Look! Pewter City, 3 Miles!" Said Ash...

After about 10 minutes of walking, Ash finally arrived at The Pewter City Gym. But before Ash could walk

in, about 17 ladies walked in!

"Same old Brock!" Said Ash with a smirk.

The door opened automatically.

"Improvements! I like! I like!" Said Ash.

Ash slowly walked in, and out of nowhere, Brock appeared!

"Hi, hi there, are you late? Please, please, enjoy yourself at the spa! Or get a facial in this room!"

Said Brock.

"BROCK!!! If you would open your eyes for once, you would realize that I'm not a girl, nor do I resemble

a female!" Yelled Ash.

"Ash! Buddy! What brings you here? This is what I call a surprise!" Exclaimed Brock!

Little did Brock know, he was about to go on a trip to Valencia with Ash and Misty to see Prof. Ivy.

"Well, you see, I got a call from Prof. Oak that he needs me to check something out." Said Ash.

"Sooo... You came here instead? Why didn't you just ring his doorbell? He does live beside you ya know!"

Said Brock, very confused.

"Well, Oak sent whatever it was that he needed me to check out to Ivy and..." Ash was cut off.

"IVY!?" "IVY!?" "IVY!?" "There's no way! No way I'm tagging along, if that's what you came here for!"

Said Brock.

Ash had completely forgotten! Brock can't go near Prof. Ivy! Ever since his "bad experinence," he never

wants to go near her again! Suddenly, Brock turned purpleish blue, and sat in the far corner of the gym.

Ash got fed up, and decided to leave.

"So, the only person that will come along with me will be Misty. Well, Cerulean's not too far off, I'll

try it!" Said Ash.

"Pi Pika Chu!"

So Ash walks down the path, and reaches some tall grass.

"Tall grass? Bring it on!" Said Ash.

Ash ran through the grass, jumping over logs, kicking sticks out of the way, when suddenly...

"Furrret! Furr Furr!" Said something lurking in the grass!

"Huh? Did someone say something?"

"Furr... Furr-et!"

A Pokemon came right out of the grass! It threw a handfull of sand right in Ash's eyes!

"Ugh... Get back here... Pokemon!" Said Ash while running into a tree.

"Go, Treecko!"

A Treecko popped out of the ball, and put it's twig in it's mouth.

"Tackle him, Treecko!" Said Ash in fury!

"Treeeeee-CKO!" Screamed Treecko as the Furret was knocked to the ground.

"Pokeball, GO!" Yelled Ash.

But before the pokeball could reach the pokemon, 10 other Furrets stepped in, and knocked the ball

outta' there! The Furrets had blue bandanas with white symbols on them, and they had black and white

sriped shirts. Little did Ash know, these Furrets weren't ordinary Pokemon. You could say that they have

a resemblance to Meowth.

"What are you doing to our friend? Tell us!" Said one of them.

Ash, VERY surprised just stared at him! Looked, and looked, and looked. Until finally he did

something... He fell over.

"Pika! Pi Pika! Pika Pika Chu?"

"Yeah, I'm alright Pikachu. You guys can talk!?" Said Ash with a surprised tone.

"Yeah... And you know what else? Were gonna beat the snot outta ya!" Said a Furret at the back.

Who are these Furrets? Will Ash make his way to Misty? Most importantly, will Ash make his way to Prof.

Ivy? Find out in the next chapter of "The Escape" by Phurret.

TO BE CONTINUED!

 

[Mr Cat Dog]

Erm, that bit with the talking Furrets was funny, but that was the only real good thing about it. The plot at this point is vague, but I suppose that will be sorted out in Chapter 3 or even Chapter 4. The main things that let you down in this fic were the description and the grammar. I could not picture a single thing.

After about 10 minutes of walking, Ash finally arrived at The Pewter City Gym. But before Ash could walk

What happened in these 10 minutes of walking? Did Ash encounter any Pokemon, did he pass through Viridian Forest? Anything? Even if nothing of major importance happened, it still would have been nice to describe the surroundings at least. This would improve the length, which is pretty short at this minute. The grammar was weird, but I suppose it might have been the word processing program you're using (you are using one right?).
Well, there are a lot of things to be improved here. I hope that you improve them all by the next chapter. :D

 

[Phurret]

Unless you call "NANO" (Linux version of Notepad.) A Text Processing Program, then no. I just type it up, paste it, and... Well, I post it! :P I know, It sucks, but at least it was fun! :D

 

[Mr Cat Dog]

It really is best to type it up onto something like MS Word. Once you've written it into NANO, then you should copy and paste it to Word, spell and grammar check it, and then copy and paste to here. You'll get much better reviews if the spelling and grammar is all correct.

~ MCD