The Great Fossil Rush

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    Title The Great Fossil Rush

    Title​
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    The Great Fossil Rush ​



    Plot​

    One morning on a very hot day there was 3 middle aged kids named Steve, Jessica and Ryan. They had all grew up in the same village. Ever since then they all wanted to follow their father's footsteps and become the world's greatest pokemon master's. So on that same hot day they came up with an idea to travel the country. And catch rare and very strong and powerful pokemon.



    There are 3 middle aged kids. I will be playing as all of them.
    Each of the 3 kids have 1 pokemon each.
    The names are:
    Steve's: pokemon is Charmander
    Jessica's: pokemon is Squirtle
    Ryan's: pokemon is Pikachu
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    Alittle info about each of the 3 middle aged kids.


    Steve's looks:Is 6'2 with blond hair,blue eyes,wears baggy blue jeans with a short sleave shirt.
    personality:is really smart,brave,powerful and very mellow.very talktive helpful,gets very mad until he losses his temper.
    Lives in a small village surrounded by alot of trees and tall grass.


    Jessica's looks:is 5'8 with long brown hair some times in a ponytail.has green eyes,wears black pants with a white shirt.
    personality gets scared alot,a nice freindly person,can get moody some times when angry,smart and helpful, can be shy at times, gets up set alot.
    Also lives in a small village surrounded by alot of trees and tall grass and pretty flower's.



    Ryan's looks:is 6'2 with black spiked hair, dark coloered eyes, diesel
    personality:brave,very short tempted person,talktive,helpful,gets anrgy very fast,likes fighting,
    lives in a small village​

    Chapter 1: ​

    Leaving the village and now entering the desert​

    They all left the village and started walking around in the desert. That was made of dry reddish sand that had covered the ground. It was really hot and they couldn't bare to be in the hot sun for much longer. They finally had got out of the desert. They stopped for a few minute's to to take a break. "Jessica said hey look guys straight ahead there is a tall tree we can go sit under the tree and ge tout of the hot sun for a bit. After about 10 minutes they said it's time to start walking again. As they were walking they saw a sign. They went and read what the sign had said. It said Cinnabar Island on it. They then walked up to the main gate of the village.


    Now entering Cinnabar Island

    So they entered the village and found another sign that said Inn to the right. They then started walking to the right until they found a big building that has a sign that says Inn on the window. "Steve says let's go Jessica and Ryan it's getting kinda late were gonna be staying the night at the Inn." They entered the Inn And walked up to the man sitting at the desk. They chip in money so they can all stay the night at the Inn. "The man says here you go here are the keys. They all went upstairs to find their room number. Once inside the room they started to get ready for bed. Then they all said good night and went to sleep. They then woke up ealey in the morning and then gave the keys back to the man at the desk. Then walked outside and walked around the village to take in the pretty site of the whole village. They then walked into the poke market to buy 6 poke balls each and 6 potions each. Ryan sees an old man. Ryan walks up to the old man and says hello." "The old man says hello back." Ryan asks do you know a place where there are rare or very powerful strong pokemon are at? "Old man says yes I do. "Old man says go to Grandpa Canyon."
     
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    Nice fic on Prehistory

    Maybe a Armaldo or a nest of kabutos' egg could makes things complicated
     
    Now exiting Cinnabar Island

    Grandpa Canyon​


    Steve, Jessica and Ryan all leave the Cinnabar Island village. Jessica uses and borrows her squirtles hidden powers to we can swim across the ocean. Once they had arriveed on the other side of land they found a sign that said canyons on it. Steve,Jessica and Ryan walked into the canyon then all of the lights went out then they all fell down a big dith hole. Ryan takes his flash light out from his back-pack and turns it on. They then just had uncovered a nesting colony of kabutops.

    "Steve says uh oh Jessica and Ryan where in big trouble!!! There is alot of very angry kabutops.

    Ryan started to get very annoyed with the kabutops so he got anrgy and crushed up his fist. Ryan then gets his red and white sphere out.


    Go Pikachu!" exclaimed Trainer Ryan, as he through out a red and white sphere. Pikachu came out and eyed his opponents. The wild kabutops flew together as 1 group. "Pikachu, use your thunder attack!" said Trainer Ryan as his pokemon launched the thunder attack right at the group of the angry Kabutops. The kabutops Tryed to use sharp sickle. But Ryan said Watch out Pikachu for the sharp sickle!!! Pikachu started running side to side doging the Kabutops sharp sicle attack.

    "Your doing great Pikachu! Keep chasing them down with thrunder bolt attacks!"commanded Trainer Ryan as his pikachu launched multiple thunder bolts at the fighting Pokemon. All of the Kabutops got even more angryer and started to all attack Pikachu all at once with sharp sicle.

    "No Pikachu we cannot lose to a bunch of Very angry Kabutops! ryan was getting upset cause his Pikachu was getting hurt and started to get mad and crush his fist up. "Trainer Ryan says Pikachu use your thundershock to paralyze them then use thunder on them. Pikachu used thunder on the Kabutops and killed them.

    "Trainer Ryan says great job Pikachu, then he pick up his Pikachu and feeds him an apple.












    As they keep walking they hear a noise then they hear another noise. *Jessica says what is that strange noise?" And where is it coming from"? All of a Sudan a wild pink vulpix with blue eyes comes out of nowhere. "Steve says wow!!!!. They all looked at the pretty pink Vulpix with blue shiny eyes. "Steve says IM gonna catch it." "Steve says Charmander use scratch on the wild Vulpix." Charmander goes and attacks Vulpix with scratch. "Steve says Charmander now use scratch again. Charmander hits Vulpix with another scratch. It weakens up the wild Vulpix. Steve then reaches into his backpack and pulls out a poke ball and throw's it at Vulpix for the catch. 1.2.3 Vulpix has been caught. "Steve says yes I caught a Vulpix."

    They kept walking until they found a ladder that goes up. Steve, Jessica and Ryan all climbed the ladder up. They then found an opening that leads outside of the Canyons. They then followed the road south. They found a sign that says Saffron City.
     
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    My suggestion, er...

    Are u in Cinnabar or Saffron how did u get there so fast. Teleport?
    So far my fic character who uses Hidden Power to borrow his Pokemon's attacks can do that, borrowing his Flygon's fly attack!
     
    Maybe like I suggested tey fell in a cave in the canyon and uncovered a nesting colony of kabutops and they were in trouble
     
    The best way to add the bios is to ingrain them in the story. Describe the characters in the story and use CHARACTER to justify how they act and how developed their personality is. I personally don't like fanfics with bios in the opening. It just totally takes my mood off. Especially overly large font. Just try to make it a bit small since while I'm reading, my eye glances off into the bolded, sized words. It just distracts me.

    As for the story, it's basically anime styled battling. You don't have enough description to let me have that mental picture of what's happening so most of the time, for me, the background is one big, blank screen.

    After reading Frostweaver's overused Pokemon list, your main character's Pokemon are in there...

    It's best you go over this thread first... It's stickied and it said: "READ FIRST"

    https://www.pokecommunity.com/threads/14020
     
    rea:hey

    Ok oni flygon I fixed all the big bold words and chaged them to a size 2. And i lowered the title down to a size 3. I have changed some things around. I still have more detail to fill in though on the 3 people. And TTYO i used your idear about the 3 people falling down a ditch and getting the Kabutops very angry. Then made a battle scean thing might have to change it around alittle though.
     
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    Saffron City

    Saffron City​



    Once Steve.Jessica and Ryan had entered Saffron City then stopped and looked around. They saw alot of rich people and people training pokemon. They kept walking around some more and saw nice buildings and nice tall apple trees. Jessica goes and picks some apples off the tree and puts them in her back-pack for later. Jessica whois the yougest of the 3 middle aged kids starts to get upset and starts to cry. "steve walks up to Jessica and asks what's wrong". "Jessica says I miss not being home and i start to get upset and start crying". "Steve says oh, Then tells Jessica it is ok and then wraps his arms around her and holds her close. Then he wipes her tears away from her shiney sparkly eyes.



    Jessica starts looking up into the pretty blue sky and starts. "Ryan says hey, Steve and Jessica we need to get some bikes so we can ride bikes town to town. They start to look for a bike shop. They finally find the bike shop after looking around the town. They enter the bike shop and start looking at the bikes. They each buy a BMX bike . Steve buy's a blike bike, Jessica buy's a red bike and Ryan buy's a black bike. They all pay the bike shop person for the 3 bikes then leave, They then go find a bike rack to locl up the 3 bikes.
     
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