The Reading and Writing Club

you said it admant doger! poetry does rock! lol! well, ive made another one and its a bit long so, i just hope you and the other members like it:

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you said i could always count on you
whenever i needed you
but instead,
you were the one who always needed my help
you where always laughing at every great things ive done
you said it looked stupid
but theres nothing more stupid than you

i always thought that friends where
supposed to help each other
but i thank you
for changing that
you have showed me the bad things
the world can do to me

you said as long as we would stick together
we'd be alright
we'd be okay
but i was stupid and you broke me down
ill never forget the day you destroyed me

but when the tables turn
youll remember me
youll be wishing i was there for you
but all will be there is an image of me
laughing at you
and as time goes by
youll wonder why youre all alone

when you wake up
you always call me
but now that ive realized,
i always hang up before you could speak
you wish youve never done the things
that the world is doing to me right now
now is the time that you should disappear in my memory
ill be fine as soon as i get your picture right out of my mind...

so? how was it? its alittle bit rough, but i think it should do
 
As a rough copy, it has potential, but it needs a great deal of refining. the idea is solid, but you stick to people rather bluntly. Try being a little more oblique.
 
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