Dragonfly Z
Frozen Soul
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- 15
- Years
- Mahogany Town
- Seen Dec 21, 2009
I feel the gentle breeze
The air is cold and calm
The sun begins to hide
And I feel something in the air
Something is not right
The snowflakes become larger
The wind starts to cry
Snow comes more rapidly
Becoming more aggressive
The darkness traps me
The snowflakes begin to attack
Stinging my skin
The wind flows through me
Taking advantage of me
Taking me away
The wind is too fierce
I fall into the snowy pillow
The cold is too much
I begin to lose vision
The storm has won
As I lose conciousness
I see one last sight
A rose lay untouched by the storm
And as I blacked out, I knew
There was hope
Ehehe, this is my first poem...I'm not poetic whatsoever, I just thought I'd give this a try. I'm not even sure if this is even a poem...I don't know the rules of poetry.
So please tell me what you think, all forms of criticism are accepted. (Except bad ones.)
Again, sorry if its bad...That's just my first try.
:)
The air is cold and calm
The sun begins to hide
And I feel something in the air
Something is not right
The snowflakes become larger
The wind starts to cry
Snow comes more rapidly
Becoming more aggressive
The darkness traps me
The snowflakes begin to attack
Stinging my skin
The wind flows through me
Taking advantage of me
Taking me away
The wind is too fierce
I fall into the snowy pillow
The cold is too much
I begin to lose vision
The storm has won
As I lose conciousness
I see one last sight
A rose lay untouched by the storm
And as I blacked out, I knew
There was hope
Ehehe, this is my first poem...I'm not poetic whatsoever, I just thought I'd give this a try. I'm not even sure if this is even a poem...I don't know the rules of poetry.
So please tell me what you think, all forms of criticism are accepted. (Except bad ones.)
Again, sorry if its bad...That's just my first try.
:)