TJgamer's Activity

[Zeffy]

This is a poem I made to the person I see here almost every other day.

TJgamer's Activity

This person right here,
His name is TJgamer, dear,
He's the one to be blamed,
For keeping this section sane.

That man right here, you see,
Makes this section so full of glee,
That everytime I visit,
I see his name very explicit.

This place is different without him,
It becomes so dark and dim,
So our thanks we must offer,
So he will not leave any sooner.

 

[Regeneration]

Oh my! How nice of you, Zeffy! I'm sure TJgamer shall be pleased with you. I think you should name this poem, "An ode to TJgamer" instead. XD

'Nuff of praise. Back to critique~! :(

In keeping this section sane.

Grammatically going, this should be "For keeping this section sane."

Its so dark and very dim,

I don't think the word "very" goes in well. I don't really know how to put it, but it doesn't sound well.

Overall, I like it. :D
I hope TJgamer is not going to leave us, your last line of the poem made me feel so. ;_;

 

[Zeffy]

Thank you. I've changed "so" to "for" thank you.
And I've made changes to the line with "dim".

Hope its ok! ^^;

 

[Regeneration]

The replaced lines are perfect. Yup, it's all fine now.

I wonder why TJgamer hasn't commented on this yet. :P

 

[TJgamer]

...I...am....speechless!
Zeffy, Regeneration, and all my other friends. Thank you so much!!
I know I have spent a lot of time here in the poetry section, but....wow!
I never had any intentions to leave, but after this, I now promise you, I will stay as long as I can.

I, again, thank you all very much!

The art of poetry,
Shall never die,
Words, rhythm, feelings,
Go give it a try.