Unofficial Sonic Poem Theme

[Sonic the Hedgehog]

It doesn't matter now.
As long as I know how.
I can run faster,
Than you've ever ran.
Even if I span.

Now, go, Sonic!
I'm not bionic,
If you thought
You ought
To try for a goal.
Put it down the hole!

You can run,
You can't hide.
Reach the other side,
Of the rainbow!
There's no stoppin' me!

Gotta go faster,
Before I cause a disaster!
Oh yeah!
There's no stoppin' me,
'Cause I'm Sonic!

 

[mew42003]

Good Job!Need a little work though.7/10

~James

 

[Kayota]

ANYTHING *kills caps lock* Sonic is cool for me. XD

 

[Kyosuke]

Its hard to tell with this one, its one of those type of songs you have to hear someon e singing it to seeing how it really is ^^. Good effort, but when you said:

"Now, go, Sonic!
I'm not bionic,
If you thought
You ought
To try for a goal.
Put it down the hole!"

There just seemed to be too much rhyming there for it to really sound good, maybe type using diffrent words that sound good together isted of basic rhyming words such as "goal" and "hole"

All in all though, great job ^^.

 

[angel]

I liked it but didn't get it.

 

[Kelsey]

It doesn't matter now.
As long as I know how.
I can run faster,
Than you've ever ran.
Even if I span.

Now, go, Sonic!
I'm not bionic,
If you thought
You ought
To try for a goal.
Put it down the hole!

You can run,
You can't hide.
Reach the other side,
Of the rainbow!
There's no stoppin' me!

Gotta go faster,
Before I cause a disaster!
Oh yeah!
There's no stoppin' me,
'Cause I'm Sonic!

Awwwwwwwwws, it's so cute! <3 I really like Sonic, he's such a cool little blue hedgehog. ^^ Now, this song is pretty good, but I'm worried about it's flow. I just feels as though each line is too short.

I might suggest adding more to some of the lines, just add some more nouns or adjectives or something. XD I didn't spot any spelling errors so that's very good. ^^

Well, if you need any special help with this song or another piece of your work, then feel free to PM me. ^_~

~Kelsey