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[monkeyandhead]

This is a song I wrote up a few weeks ago, I've got solid music backing it but I think I just need some help with a few lines from it. But whatever, here goes:

(Verse 1)
I've been walking around an empty backyard,
making up riddles in my head.
Left for stranded in a deathened courtyard,
nowhere warm to rest my head,
and I cant breathe.

(Chorus)
Don't take me for granted 'cause I can't take it,
you left me here alone and wasted.
Don't take me for granted 'cause I can't take it,
you left me here alone and wasted,
alone and wasted,
alone.

(Verse 2)
I guess you can't turn back time,
and fix my obvious problems no.
I've lost my way stuck in a hole,
the days are now twelve months old.

(Verse 3)
Clawed together by ruminations,
I'm waiting for my heart attack.
But when I find an open window,
I guess there's no turning back,
and I can't breathe.

(Bridge)
And I can't breathe!
And I can't breathe!
And I can't breathe!
Breathe!

(Chorus)
Don't take me for granted 'cause I can't take it,
you left me here alone and wasted.
Don't take me for granted 'cause I can't take it,
you left me here alone and wasted,
alone and wasted,
alone.

(Outro)
You left me here alone and wasted,
alone and wasted,
alone.

 

[TJgamer]

As I have said in the past, I cannot truly critique a song unless I hear it for myself.
The lyrics, however, you did a nice job on. A few words could use a bit of scanning and see if any should be altered.
But that's your choice, not mine.