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The new CoD game looks really good, seen a trailer for it a while back. I'm a big CoD fan so I'll be buying that.

Mission Impossible? O.o I didn't like that either. Well, you don't know the mission yet, and the way I see it, it's not impossible. ^^ Well it's good to know I'm improving from my last chapters. Thanks.

Yeah.. it is a bit random, theres random thats funny, and theres random thats not funny. Little bit of random- Good. Too much random- Bad. That's how I see it. ^^

hahaahaha, thanks for the funny comment. ^^

Hmmm.. it's better than love scandal, however this time there is a different sort of lack of description. In the last story there was too much talking which made it confusing, this time pretty much nothing is described at all. What do the Pokemon look like? What do the characters look like...

You could have posted it here??? O.o

Hey thanks alot :) I'm working on next chapter.

As you said it's your friends story and not yours, I would suggest telling him there should be some description of what's actually going on rather than lots of talking. And you can post of all it, or if that long more of it, as what you posted isn't too long. By long do you mean lots and lots...

I'm a little confused to what actually happened, it seemed to be aload of people talking and lack of description of whats actually going on. Maybe its just me.

Oh that's good news. We should see a big improvement. :D Can't wait for Chapter 3.

Hey guys! Finally, after all this time I defeated him! Didn't even have to use an oran berry, all I did was keeping stunning and putting him to sleep. Wouldn't have done it without you guys! Thanks. :D

It was a very good chapter but half if its ruined by the grammar and spelling mistakes. You must be running it through a word document or spell checker right? There's alot of mistakes that you would notice straight away with a document/checker. Take your time, by using one of these it will make...

I got a vile seed. Any good? My Pokemon are both level 20 now. Squirtle has bubble, this is ranged. I've got a large load of stuns and sleeps, tons of orans so I should do alot better now. Squirtle also had rapid spin, will this do any good on Groudon? Also, I taught myself Rock Slide to...

Hey there, I like it. The storie is slightly different from what other people do, you've added your own touch to it which is good. There's a few missing commas and fullstops but all of these can be fixed like SupahFunk said. Keep going, looking forward to the next chapter. :)

Chapter 2 Pinsir Luke had the pokeball in his hand. He peered round; the Pinsir seemed to be inspecting something on the ground. Luke whistled loudly, it echoed slightly. The Pinsir stopped dead, and slowly looked towards the tree. It stared hard, and then it heard a thump. It’s eyes...