Nyu, another FF writer interested in RPing? Will wonders never cease? xD Anyways...yeah, this is not really the place for this sort of thing, which does reminds me: maybe we should have a thread like that? You know, a general discussion thread for RPers? Unless that would be too spammy of course...it's just that there's a lot of stuff that really has no place to go here. o.O
Ahem, ramblings aside:
1) Pretty much what has been said already; you've just got to rack your imagination a little. On the plus side, though, you really learn to relate characters' feelings and explain attacks in detail. ;D Pre-arranging some things saves a lot of time so it's probably preferred. I'm not very fond of PvPs, though; people tend to get too protective about their characters and then we get a bajillion posts where neither party agrees to lose. RPer vs NPC usually works out better. :3
2) Yeah, no real explanation for this one. Sometimes an RP flies, sometimes it doesn't; it depends on a number of things you can't directly affect like RPer attendance and interest. Sometimes people just lose interest in the plot after they've RPed on it a little, sometimes real life issues take up their time, and sometimes they turn out to be
JUST PLAIN LAZY GITS!
Totally not referring to anyone in particular with that.
Anyways, I do agree that over-complicating the plot or RP world is likely to alienate RPers. There should always be space for personal creativity, because if the RPers feel that it's not only the RP master's show but theirs as well they will feel a lot more motivated to keep going with it. Besides, everyone contributing to the plot is why we are writing RP instead of fanfiction in the first place. x3
And Brad...that's forum advertising and not really appreciated. <.< We used to have many awesome RPers here, it's just that a lot of them have reached the point in life when they have a lot of more important things than forums to concern themselves with. As for your plot...
War. Famine. Pestilence. Death. These are the four things the legendary 4 Horseman will bring to the world when the Apocalypse happens. In the Pokemon world, this has happened. Long after the days of Ash Ketchum, in a different world. The countries had biological missiles, terraforming, and other catastrophic advancements in war. In this world, one event happened. And this sparked… the Apocalypse.
Four horsem
an? Is that like...a four-in-one package? o.O You're missing a plural there. Besides, numbers ten and below are written out in letters so it 'four'; not '4'. You also have a contradiction in the worlds bit; first you're saying that the apocalypse occurred in the pokémon world, next you're saying that it occurred in a different world. Make up your mind. xP Besides, how the heck is terraforming (the art of reshaping land to make it
more hospitable for life) a catastrophic advancement in war? It makes no sense. -.-
The first horseman, who brought War, was none other than President of Johto, Raul Jezkar. He one by a vote by Johto's Supreme Court, ruined the countries economy, and was a conservative. He believed in retaining tradition, and believing Kanto had weapons of mass destruction (which they did), allied with Fiore and Orre. However, his next action was one that would cost the world a whole lot. You see, Kanto had an alliance with Sinnoh and Hoenn, which were stronger and more industrialized than Johto's friends.
Being a conservative sits right next to ruining the country's economy on his list of heinous deeds. Wow, talk about bias. I'm not big on conservatives myself, but there seems to be a distinct personal political message embedded here and I don't really appreciate it. xP Incidentally, at no point has Kanto, Johto, or any of the other states been marked as an independent nation. In fact, as was pointed out by Yamato-San in the fanfic lounge, given the use of the term 'National Dex' for a pokédex there seems to be more evidence to support the interpretation that they're all regions within the same country. Given that Kanto and Johto even share the same pokémon league
and are connected geographically, I find it highly unlikely that they'd be politically separate. There is also zero explanation for how this nincompoop got voted into his position (one which, incidentally, has never even been mentioned in canon material).
When Johto bombed naval bases in the Seafoam Islands, Route 127, and the sea west to Sinnoh, which enraged their respective government. Soon, the world was in war. Johto was ripped apart by the Kanto Alliance, called the Triple Threat, and Orre and Fiore were blockaded and nuked mercilessly, giving them a horrid plague. This plague were later spread, but here is the jist- it slowly decays a persons organs, and destroys nutrients needed for life. Transmitted by anything, it is uncurable, and destroyed the populations of the other two nations. With its allies out, Johto was quickly conquered, and sliced up. In addition, Southern Johto, Southeastern Hoenn, Southwestern Kanto, and Southeastern Sinnoh contracted plague. Twinleaf, Sandgem, Oreburgh, Pastoria, Littleroot, Oldale, Dewport, Verdanturf and Fallarbor, Cianwood, Azalaea, Cherrygrove, and New Bark, Pallet, Fuschia and Lavender all basically crumbled because their populations died of this plague. However, all the other cities were spared. Sinnoh took Mt. Silver, Blackthorn, Olivine, Goldenrod, and the Orange Islands, Hoenn took Violet City (heavily fortified, only other city in southern Johto that wasn't infected), and Kanto took the Whirl Islands, Mahogany, and Ecruteak with terraforming. Plagued areas, including the aforementioned cities and routes surrounding, Orre and Fiore, all became a continent. The people there suffered from the plague, until most people there were dead. War had cost all the nations a horrid price.
More glaring inconsistency. If nukes were tossed about left and right in the manner you describe we'd also be talking a lot more than just an epidemic; we'd be talking big-ass ecological disaster like nuclear winter (clouds of soot and dust obscuring solar rays and basically dropping earth temperatures to inhabitable levels); not even the craziest politicians have been dumb enough to go through with that, and given that they'd not only be turning their conquest uninhabitable for years (which is stupid since they already had them outnumbered and overpowered) but also risking severe drawbacks themselves, I just don't find this scenario plausible...at all.
The second Horseman, who brought Famine, was not a person, but the plague. This hit Hoenn and Sinnoh. The plague infected berries, which wiped out Hoenn's economy. Sinnoh fared better with non-berry fruit in the Orange Islands replacing berries. Half of Hoenn's economy was destroyed, and Petalburg, Lavaridge, Fortree and Rustboro, the centers of the berry markets, lost many businesses. This led to poverty, and Pokemon rampaging for food. Corsola in Pacifidlog left for better food, drowning every citizen there. Then, Fortree, Rustboro and Petalburg were overrun with Pokemon, and the crazed beasts killed the senior citizens neighborhoods, as well as the slums in each city. Petalburg was worst hit- very few escaped, and most died of injury. This loss of life was huge for Hoenn. In addition, food was low, and many others in the attacked cities died of starvation and fighting for food.
Half of Hoenn's economy is built on berries...riiiiight...get real, seriously. Hoenn is quite technologically advanced with companies like Devon Corp; it's most certainly
not an agricultural country. :\ Pokémon suddenly going rabid for no apparent reason also makes no sense whatsoever.
After Famine, hungry Pokemon, the Third Horseman, brought Pestilence to Sinnoh. The hungry animals rebelled, and massacred Floaroma and Solaceon. Then, they caught plague, resulting in more death for Pokemon. This hit would hurt Sinnoh later, although they come out of this the least scathed.
How do you massacre a town? Makes no sense. I also don't see a point for massacring anything if what you really want to do is find berries. And I thought that the nuke-induced plague had already spread? WTF?
Finally, Death came, in the form of the 4th Horseman- The Knights of Johto. This terrorist group ravaged Kanto, destroying most of Pewter and Viridian cities. Many more died fighting them after being drafted. Kanto was hit hard by the group, but they had to retreat to the underground of the plague continent, called Johtorre. In Johtorre, the old plague got into their tunnels and killed off the Knights.
Because obviously we didn't already have death, like everywhere? So who's bright idea was it to create a team with the sole purpose of killing people? This makes no sense whatsoever, especially in a situation where the rational human being wants to hoard up food and hide somewhere safe.
Evenutally, legends succumbed to the horror. Uxie, Azelf, Mesprit, Zapdos, Moltres, Celebi, Deoxys, Mewtwo, Manaphy, and Phione- hurting the already bad situation.
Now this is just plain random...you'd think that legends would be the
last ones to fall since they're the strongest of the pokémon species.
The losses crippled many economies and populations. Many people died, but even more species of Pokemon were wiped out. Here is a list, by alphabetical type, that shows just how many species or evolutionary lines (These are if it has Line after the name of the species. In addition, if a line is only partially disrupted, the top species produces the next highest species above the extinct one of the line, or, in some cases, itself, from eggs.) Overall, most Pokemon species were wiped out by the catastrophe- either from human destruction during rampages or the plague. Bug, Normal, Water and Flying types were the worst hit.
No, just no. Never put a list in the middle of a plot. If you need one, just give it as additional information
after the plot points have been covered. A lot of your species choices also make no sense. How do you justify favoring the survival of species like Scyther over far more resilient species like Foretress? How do you kill off
ghosts? They are ALREADY DEAD for crying out loud! >_< If you want to do post-apocalyptic, at least try to use some logic in thinking out what will survive instead of playing personal favorites. :\ Bugs in general tend to be among the species best adapted to post-nuclear environments, btw; how come they are the ones taking the biggest hit (Instead of grass, which would be the obvious candiadate)?
The incredible loss of life enraged the legendaries. All of them, except the two Creators, Mew and Arceus, decided to leave. Arceus tried to plead to them not to go, but they said they already had made a continent, and new Pokemon, and they said that they would protect the new continent. They also took the best normal and shiny specimens of every surviving species- about 4 of each type and gender combination, and put them on the new continent. The fakemon also had 4 of each type and gender combo for their populations. Pure-hearted humans were also allowed to leave- and they did. The group left, not to be seen for a long time after- at least 100 years, if not more. Arceus and Mew were despondent. Without guardians, the world would deteriorate at a much faster rate, especially with humans. They, in their sadness and rage, went to sleep for 77 years.
First off, who in their right mind would name a their creation fakemon? That's a fan term that makes no sense within a setting where they would be just as real as other pokémon species. Randomly creating shinies is also just plain cheap. And...some creators these two are. "Oh, look, the world we created and are supposed to protect is going down the crapper. Well, screw you guys; we're just going to whip up a few shinies and go have a power nap."
In the years, conditions worsened. People died from starvation, poverty and crime, while the government in Johtorre turned to anarchy, as did Hoenn's populus. Without the trainer economy, the countries collapsed, but Sinnoh and Kanto had natural resources, while Hoenn did not. Sinnoh came out the best, and began to rebuild, but sent Mt. Silver into the Orange Islands colony. Their economy thrived on fur, mining, alternate fuels from the Orange Islands- and a good republic with a capitalist economy. Hoenn suffered, with violence and crime claiming a ton of lives in many routes. The country was an anarchy, but not as bad as the chaos in Johtorre. Kanto had a federal democracy, but their economy relied solely on their alcohol industry- 77% of the worlds alcohol came from Kanto. The countries continued on the path of slow death. Most of Johtorre was dead, and gangs ruled vast areas, killing those who opposed. By the end of the 77 years, only 10% of the original, Pre-Apocalypse population was still alive. In addition, a Hoenn/Kanto based group called Team Nova had unlocked evolutions hidden within Pokemon, making them extremely powerful. They also conflicted with Arceus and Mew's plan: to make new legendaries. If Team Nova found out, then Team Nova would easily conquer not only the major four continents, but the Pokemon continent as well. Arceus was afraid, and therefore decided to put the new legendaries in Mt. Silver, far from any Hoenn Team Nova bases.
So like, all infrastructure is gone, everybody is killing everybody else and there's a crazy incurable plague that transmits every which way loose in the world...so the first decision is "let's set up democracy and sell lots of alcohol"? Wow, just wow...and where precisely did Team Nova come from anyway? And how the flip did they just suddenly unlock new evolutions?
Your plot...makes no sense, to be honest. I've seen post-apocalyptic ones, yes; I've even come up with a post-apocalyptic one, but all of those had a logically developing plotline and an actual
point to them. Yours is mostly about random people making random decisions, stuff dying everywhere, lots of alcohol being sold and an uberly powerful team popping up for no apparent reason. You've also given no clear starting setting or aim for the RP. Really, there's more to good post-apocalyptic than just having a lot of terrible things happen for no apparent reason. You've also got a lot of grammatical errors which I didn't bother with here because - quite frankly - that would have taken ridiculously long to sort through.
Bottom line: I wouldn't join that RP for beans. D=
