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[Heart's Soul]

Have you ever used a joke in any of your stories that only you or a few friends understand?


A number of times, actually. In my beta version, Sarina became pregnant after she fell off a cliff, which is a hidden joke. Not many readers were able to figure that part out, so I just cut it out entirely.

 

[JX Valentine]

First, I must say I applaud your new screen name, Hippy!. That's just sheer awesome right there.

That being said...

Have you ever used a joke in any of your stories that only you or a few friends understand?

I don't do it that often because I've learned that inside jokes from my friends don't really work on a wide audience. (Although I seriously want to insert a moment where a character uses a your mom insult on someone else. I would be heavily amused by my imagination if I got this character to be Bill and pulled it off.) I do, however, throw in enough geek references into my fics to see who gets them. For example, AEM? It's slightly funnier than it seems to be once you can pick out the references. There's a ton of side jokes including references to The Metamorphosis (which in turn is a joke where Bill inadvertently hangs a lampshade for multiple reasons), the 1980's version of The Fly, and Neon Genesis Evangelion. In other words, the joke's mainly in the allusions.

As for the Mary Sue question I posed earlier, I could go into a list of all the ones I came up with when I was starting out, but I'll just say I've done everything from godly self-insertions (even though I didn't get a chance to reveal that it was) to Japanese schoolgirls with groan-worthy names and the ability to attract my favorite characters. Oh, thirteen-year-old self. Bad author.

 

[Frostweaver]

Well we'll call them "easter eggs" in a sense if you're including things that normal people will read and either not notice anything but they are hilarious for selective individuals. It's a fun read for them sometimes as most likely you know your beta readers at least a tiny bit, and it enlightens up the day while functioning as a token of appreciation to add those insertions.

 

[Breezy]

Because I'm a great procrastinator and hate this paper I have to writeeee ...

Have you ever used a joke in any of your stories that only you or a few friends understand?

There's a, heh, porn gag in my rewrite of one of my stories that the older readers get but threw off the newer ones (I think). It's funny. :3

In my "older than the dinosaurs and I really have no idea how it's still alive to this day" story, I know there's a few in there. Unfortunately that story has taken me so long, I don't remember what exactly the inside jokes were about. >_>

Mary Sues. Let's face it. We've probably all had 'em. What were some of yours, and how were they Mary Sues?

My Mary Sues are still alive and kicking in one of my stories, and it's too late to fix it since it would drastically change the story and I would have to revise all sixty something chapters. Well, fifty really.

Actually, the characters themselves aren't necessarily Mary Sues/Gary Stus, but the way their pokemon evolved was so incredibly rushed that it is Mary Sue-like. Both characters had most of their pokemon evolve around the same time (and how convenient that the starters of both characters happened to evolve in the same chapter for BOTH evolutions. Sigh). I think I made their starters evolve too early (in my opinion, though I got comments wondering why the starters haven't evolved yet).

 

[Ninja Caterpie]

Have you ever used a joke in any of your stories that only you or a few friends understand?

Probably have somewhere. Dunno. Can't remember. Don't want to. xD

 

[Swift!]

Have you ever used a joke in any of your stories that only you or a few friends understand?
I've never used one, but this question has made me want to now.

 

[bobandbill]

Have you ever used a joke in any of your stories that only you or a few friends understand?

Many a time! XD I have a number of in-jokes in my main fic - a large number, in fact. I tend to have them as really minor and basiaclly unnoticable to people who wouldn't get it though (so that they don't have a feeling of 'it seems to be intended to be funny... but how?'), or so that it's amusing both ways. Some are just phrases or situations, or even stuff like random numbers. Also I make a number of references to other stuff as well if one looks - some are stuff only I would get. -_-

 

[borax12]

hi friends
i am gonna start a new fan fiction soon
the idea being to -
create an epic Pokemon journey,and not another stereotyped tale of a boy becoming a great leader.

my FF will focus entirely on human emotions,the suspicious and shady side of a human being.

the fan fic will involve the regions of hoenn,jhotto and kanto

this idea fascinated me to write was to create a new adventure altogether of finding truth's ,face bitter realities and fantasies beyond imagination

major elements of my tale being two divisions being created in the Pokemon world,secrets that unfold in the most clever style,and of course the first time idea of giving the protagonist a split personality that somehow affects his ways of living and believing the worldly ways,the story is set up after a time gap of at least 100 years after pokemon ruby,emerald and sapphire generation and i have decided to make the atmosphere of the fan fic not futuristic but and advanced civilization

plz do read it when i bring it out
"still completing my chapters while i write this out to you
i will also bring out the cover(front cover image) soon you can have a deeper dimension into my tale
the image has all elements of surprise added to it
see if you can figure it out when i post it

waiting for a positive reply ,thanks

 

[Feathing]

Hi guys!
I visit the FFP Forum every day. I love writing and reading. I began a Fic and posted a Poetry (In Other Writings Forum) actually, but the thing is, I need help.
I wrote a OneShot Fic but I need someone else to check it for me and point me out the grammar mistakes I sure have.
English isn't my main language, so I would be very thankfull if someone can give a hand (Of course I'll give credit :) ).

PD: I don't know if this is the right place, it seemed the right one to me anyway
VM or PM if you would like to help. Thanks!
I already have someone who's helping me out. Anyway if you're curious VM or PM me!

 

[Misheard Whisper]

hi friends
i am gonna start a new fan fiction soon
the idea being to -
create an epic Pokemon journey,and not another stereotyped tale of a boy becoming a great leader.

my FF will focus entirely on human emotions,the suspicious and shady side of a human being.

the fan fic will involve the regions of hoenn,jhotto and kanto

this idea fascinated me to write was to create a new adventure altogether of finding truth's ,face bitter realities and fantasies beyond imagination

major elements of my tale being two divisions being created in the Pokemon world,secrets that unfold in the most clever style,and of course the first time idea of giving the protagonist a split personality that somehow affects his ways of living and believing the worldly ways,the story is set up after a time gap of at least 100 years after pokemon ruby,emerald and sapphire generation and i have decided to make the atmosphere of the fan fic not futuristic but and advanced civilization

plz do read it when i bring it out
"still completing my chapters while i write this out to you
i will also bring out the cover(front cover image) soon you can have a deeper dimension into my tale
the image has all elements of surprise added to it
see if you can figure it out when i post it

waiting for a positive reply ,thanks

A little advice. Start by learning how to use the Shift key, how punctuation works, and how to spell words like "please". Nobody will take you srsly (seriously) if you use 1337speak, and don't punctuate. I do hope your fic has more full stops.

 

[Swift!]

hi friends
i am gonna start a new fan fiction soon
the idea being to -
create an epic Pokemon journey,and not another stereotyped tale of a boy becoming a great leader.

my FF will focus entirely on human emotions,the suspicious and shady side of a human being.

the fan fic will involve the regions of hoenn,jhotto and kanto

this idea fascinated me to write was to create a new adventure altogether of finding truth's ,face bitter realities and fantasies beyond imagination

major elements of my tale being two divisions being created in the Pokemon world,secrets that unfold in the most clever style,and of course the first time idea of giving the protagonist a split personality that somehow affects his ways of living and believing the worldly ways,the story is set up after a time gap of at least 100 years after pokemon ruby,emerald and sapphire generation and i have decided to make the atmosphere of the fan fic not futuristic but and advanced civilization

plz do read it when i bring it out
"still completing my chapters while i write this out to you
i will also bring out the cover(front cover image) soon you can have a deeper dimension into my tale
the image has all elements of surprise added to it
see if you can figure it out when i post it

waiting for a positive reply ,thanks

No offence, but judging by that post, I'm not really looking forward to reading your fic. If you can't even use proper grammar/spelling outside your fic, how are we going to expect your fic to look? That's right, terrible...

Sorry if I sounded harsh, but it's the truth.

 

[borax12]

hey actually that post was written in hurry and i promise to write in the right sense (i mean correct grammar usage and of course right usage of punctuations and language ) and for the harsh replies,no problem at all i have taken these as advices and hope to improvise on them.Please do read my FF as i will ensure the reading experience to be as error free as possible.Thanks for the replies anyways

 

[Ninja Caterpie]

Ah yes, and being in India's no excuse. If you're going to write something in English, learn the language.

 

[borax12]

Ah yes, and being in India's no excuse. If you're going to write something in English, learn the language.

hey i guess that was a rude remark because i am a high school student (12th standard )and i very well know the appropriate usage of English language .Please do not hurt a beginner's feeling.Though i know i am new to the writing world, but such disheartening replies would only curb my instincts to write well.Hoping for more positive replies.

 

[Feathing]

hey i guess that was a rude remark because i am a high school student (12th standard )and i very well know the appropriate usage of English language .Please do not hurt a beginner's feeling.Though i know i am new to the writing world, but such disheartening replies would only curb my instincts to write well.Hoping for more positive replies.

I'm with you fellow!
But don't feel sorry, you can find people who will help you out with the english grammar, so don't dissappoint and start writing :D

 

[Bay]

borax, Feathing: There's the The Beta Place where you can have someone look over your grammar mistakes and help you with it. Not only that, the betas can help you wtih other areas like plot and characters. Check it out. :)

And borax, I'm not going to criticize your grammar since everyone already pointed out you need help with it. Yes, the reality is there are people who will judge the writer based on their posts before the story is even posted as for the most part the writer's posts and the story itself will be of same writing style. However, don't worry. Like I said before, there are also people who are willing to help you get better and also everyone starts out somewhere. This is a good place to start posting your fanfiction and get feedback. I also can't stess enough going to The Beta Place.

As for your story idea, sounds interesting. The way you explain what you aim for your story to be about reminds me a lot of a few animes I watched. I would like a bit more explination on the plot and what's really going to happen, though. Like for instance, what's the situation. Is Team X trying to take over the world or trying to capture the legendary? Bad example, I know, but this is to give you an idea of what I mean by situation.

 

[borax12]

borax, Feathing: There's the The Beta Place where you can have someone look over your grammar mistakes and help you with it. Not only that, the betas can help you wtih other areas like plot and characters. Check it out. :)

And borax, I'm not going to criticize your grammar since everyone already pointed out you need help with it. Yes, the reality is there are people who will judge the writer based on their posts before the story is even posted as for the most part the writer's posts and the story itself will be of same writing style. However, don't worry. Like I said before, there are also people who are willing to help you get better and also everyone starts out somewhere. This is a good place to start posting your fan fiction and get feedback. I also can't stess enough going to The Beta Place.

As for your story idea, sounds interesting. The way you explain what you aim for your story to be about reminds me a lot of a few animes I watched. I would like a bit more explanation on the plot and what's really going to happen, though. Like for instance, what's the situation. Is Team X trying to take over the world or trying to capture the legendary? Bad example, I know, but this is to give you an idea of what I mean by situation.

Thanks a lot for that advice .I guees,i would really start practicing myself on various writing skills, though i feel i have started getting the hang of it,haven't I. As goes the fan fic ,it is surely not inspired from any animes (as far i know of them).I believe the plot would be a bit different from previously posted fan fics and it ain't any "go boy win "kind of story.I would rather classify it into a category of " tales on shady human characteristics ".
I guess my grammar is now a bit improved and by any chance if this short piece of text is error free then, i guess the fan fic will surely live upto the standards of writing previously posted.

 

[Bay]

Yes, practice makes perfect. :) As far as getting the hang of it goes, the thing is you haven't post your fic yet. After posting a few chapters, then I can answer that. ^^;

On your explanation on your plot, I get it somewhat. Would ask for more, but don't want you to spoil too much. XD

For grammar, you are getting better at it, but there are a few things you can fix. Can't pinpoint them at the moment cause my computer's slow and also I actually need to get some other things done, but I'll say this. Keep reading books to get an idea of how the writers write in the English language and how they use grammar right. Also, practice is good! :)

 

[JX Valentine]

Geez. I leave for a couple of days, and all that's added is a page. (Why no orgy while I'm gone? You people need to make me regret forgoing my online experiences in favor of schoolwork!)

Anyway, something more coherent when I'm less sleep deprived is coming, but I would like to say this:

Ah yes, and being in India's no excuse. If you're going to write something in English, learn the language.

You know, Ninja, if I recall correctly, the first and only story I've reviewed from you displayed quite a few errors in the grammar department itself.

In other words, while you have a point (that was civilly explained by Bay because, really, the newbie came here asking for feedback -- albeit positive only, which could be interpreted multiple ways, including the "no snark" policy -- not proclaiming he's the best writer ever), if you're going to comment on someone else's grammar, at least do it civilly if your own wasn't exactly near-perfect less than a year ago. (I've looked over your more recent work, The Road to Mastery, and you still seem to have a problem with compound sentences and commas in general. Not to mention the paragraph break oddities with the commands and the attacks.)

 

[.Ozymandias]

Thanks a lot for that advice .I guees,i would really start practicing myself on various writing skills, though i feel i have started getting the hang of it,haven't I. As goes the fan fic ,it is surely not inspired from any animes (as far i know of them).I believe the plot would be a bit different from previously posted fan fics and it ain't any "go boy win "kind of story.I would rather classify it into a category of " tales on shady human characteristics ".
I guess my grammar is now a bit improved and by any chance if this short piece of text is error free then, i guess the fan fic will surely live upto the standards of writing previously posted.

Hi! I guess the best thing to do is to post it and let us have a look. I like the sound of the storyline, and your grammar is not bad and is getting better with every post, so I'd agree with previous posters and try reading other works to look at grammar uses while writing yours. In the meantime, good luck with the writing and I'm looking forward to seeing your work :)