I know it's not my position to say anything but to me that su just doesn't fit the bill. It's too bland and boring, not much detail. Also your characters personality is supposed to be longer than you're Pokémons, and when I say that don't delete anything from your Pokémons personality. Up you got to say what he likes dislikes, his attitude towards various situations what he is like generally around strangers you know that's sort of thing, otherwise he's just a mysterious character wins dull personality.
Also, and I quote 'Clark who life's with his uncle on Lavander Town' for a start that's more history than a roleplay sample, which you don't have to include in the su's here but still there's really no need. plus it doesn't even make sense. Your roleplay sample should be preferably a short piece of text, doesn't even have to be about your character, just proving that you can actually do a decent post.
Sorry if it bugs you that you're getting everything wrong, but everyone makes mistakes first time round, so have another go and you'll soon get used to the ways this forum works.