~My Poetry~

[pink-tiger]

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okay? Thanks for telling me..
I know about the Proofreading..Midori I need you to start checking them again..

 

[purple-sweetflower]

Their good.But the first was sad.But the second nice sister.

 

[phantom_zangetsu]

hmm....cant say much sis......but what am i saying? heck!? course that one is kind of good.....kind of.....some erros i found but yeah that was okay-dokey! XD......

 

[pink-tiger]

Umm thaks brother.I really have to get Midori to check them im not super good with spelling or grammer!><

 

[ArKiVe]

Your poems are alright, I liked the one in your first post.

 

[purple-sweetflower]

Umm you mean the first she ever posted in here?Umm yeah that one was good as well..

 

[pink-tiger]

Umm thank you.Im almost done with my 3 other ones.But i'll only put one of them.^^
I made this poem....................

.::I wonder why::.

I wonder why
My life is the way it is?
And why I have a big smile when inside I know I'm sad?
I wonder why I reflect my life threw the dusty mirror?...

I wonder why
I keep all the bad memories close and good ones away?
Could it be that I wish to be sad inside my body?
I truly wonder why....

I wonder why
After all this time that has passed, I feel much more sad today than what I did before?
And today I find myself walking in the rain when I feel like tears will fall down my face..
And I think back if I didn't do it before when I had everything, why do I do it now?
Now when nothing has changed?

I wonder why
I have people around me who care for me, but I push them away?
Why do I push them away is what I ask myself every time I see them...

I wonder why
I feel sad but at the same time happy?
Could it be cause I'm happy because this was all a dream?
And that I'm sad cause one thing was truly a fact?

I wonder why....
Is everything I've been thinking of.
But now I know that everything I wonder is for a reason.
I'm sad because of things I could have done to improve my life..But I just let them slip away
But I'm happy because this was all a dream that reflected my problems....

I wonder why
I took so long to figure this out?
I guess the good thing is that at least I realized it at some point.

 

[Midori Chi]

Ooooh, very nice. I think you've improved quite a bit. ^^

 

[Pheles]

I like your last one. Unlike many I've read, it isn't exactly happy, but an interesting feeling of mystery and perhaps sadness. Well done. 0_0

 

[pink-tiger]

Thanks sister midori and dark-tiger
Well my next im not sure I have so many.

 

[fallen_angel]

There's not much rhythm in it and a definite pattern but its still very good. ^_^ Good Job.

 

[pink-tiger]

Well poems dont always have to rhyme.You really should know that, a lot of people wont stop telling me that.^^

 

[.: Kira Yamato :.]

your poems, grammer problems, or not....they are very god

 

[fallen_angel]

Well poems dont always have to rhyme.You really should know that, a lot of people wont stop telling me that.^^

I'm sorry alot of people tell you that but there's a difference between RHYTHM and RHYME. Oh and I DO know that poems don't have to rhyme.

RYHTHM- [noun] sound pattern created by stressed and unstressed syllables ; a regular beat

RHYME- [noun] the repetition of sound in two or more phrases

 

[~Blue_Melody~]

Umm I think she know the difference already....but your realy good sister.