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I flounce off for a few days and everybody posts. Nyah, looks like I have my work cut out for me then, eh?
@Midnight_Dragon 249: This is your first? *Blinks* Woah, in that case you're off to a grand start. Don't worry too much about the bulk, it's a far better problem to have than not having enough to say (The common problem among our RPers). However, in order to make it look less intimidating, you could try two measures:
1. Increase the amount of pargraphs. Every time you start on a new subject, make a new paragraph for it. Sure, it will still be huge, but it won't look (or feel) as overwhelming if it's a cluster of three- or four-line paragraphs as opposed to several thick walls of writing. It's a psychological thing.
2. Put some of the extra details at the end within spoiler tags. That is, the information that isn't crucially important for making an appropriate sign-up. Again, this will make the RP look smaller and less intimidating. I think it's awesome that you've put so much time and effort into creating a whole RP world, all you need to do is put a little extra thought into the presentation of it so that you can have your audience nicely addicted before they realize the full extent of what they've gotten themselves into. ^^
@Netta: Ehh...yeah, what YoshiRiRu said. I'm not familiar with the Digimon series so your digivices and mega levels are all greek to me. You lashing out on Bijou was uncalled for, though, because she actually gave you some very useful advice. Not everyone has the time and energy (or correct background information) to provide an in-depth explanation of everything that is and isn't okay with your plot (To illustrate: I, as I mentioned, don't know Digimon at all, which is why I don't feel qualified to comment on the plot beyond aesthetical things like grammar and spelling) but grammar and spelling are very important for making your plot look professional (Not to mention that a typo in the thread title can be a downright disaster) so instead of whining about what she didn't say, why don't you try to learn from what she did say? -.-
@Bijou: You-you've got an apostrophe in the plural form of sail! *Points at the end of the first paragraph* How dare you? You've disgraced the whole RP section with your unscrupulous grammar! xO
Just kidding of course (Although that grammatical error is still there and should be fixed). ^^ As for the plot itself...well, it's kind of hard to write that much when you're basing the whole thing on an existing anime (Hence why I tend to avoid plots of that kind) and adding a whole lot of background information would only attract the kind of RPers that you said you don't want (Those less familiar with One Piece). Aye, it's a dilemma, it is, all I can suggest is reference links to the correct terminology (As opposed to the dub one) and maybe creating something a bit more...binding in terms of a plotline. Personal freedom is all well and good, but it tends to leave all but a core group of RPers standing confused and unoccupied on the sidelines and the lack of a central plot (One that is shared by all concerned) tends to make progress difficult at best, but if you believe you have the skills for it (Which I think you do ^^) then by all means, go for the free format. Me, I'll stick to keeping my RPers on a leash so I can yank them along as necessary. *Is a complete control freak* xD
@Korinku: If you didn't have a proper idea to begin with, then there's not that much point in posting, you know. We're here to help, but we're not going to do you work for you. :\ As for the plot, where on earth did the two first heroes pop out from? (As I recall, getting the power to control time isn't exactly normal) How does someone who can control time (And, hence, could just freeze every opponent into place and finish them off) get defeated and why does a super-villain who can kill anyone he/she bloody well pleases need to go into hiding (Or gather up a team), especially when he/she has just killed every hero in existence? This doesn't make much sense, you know, and let's not even go into the kind of horrible historical issues that time travel implies (You know, someone born with super powers would most probably have a serious impact on what happens in the world, and just surgically removing and exporting these heroes would severly alter the space-time continum and probably create a paradox which would tear the whole thing apart) and your complete lack of setting. Where and when does this take place? How do these heroes know what needs to be done and how did they find each other? Why doesn't the big bad guy just kill off the whole lot of them and be done with it? You've got a whole lot to work on if you want this one to work.
@Killer-Swift: Ehh...that plot idea is a bit too random for my tastes (Never been big on the whole humans at war concept either). You can't just have magical teleportation portals of doom popping up for no apparent reason, and in the context of a global war, the RP characters themselves would be hopelessly insignificant. (Unless we want to go into the whole clichéd American war heroes concept, but I for one have had quite enough of that) Besides, wars are nasty...very nasty, in fact, so unless you want to completely warp the image of the thing you'll end up with a very high PG-tag to boot. Besides, this kind of war thing is rather political and could offend people (Especially portraying Americans as the great good guys against the stereotypically evil GLA people), so no, I don't really recommend going down that road. :\
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Whew, I think that's all of them. I didn't miss any of you, right? If I did, just give me a holler. ^^ I'm actually working on a plot myself (Which I hope to release in celebration of my newfound liberty once my schoolwork is over and done with for the year), but I have a terrible shortage of names, so I can't post it yet. (I suck at names, particularly for countries and suchlike T_T) Oh well, another day, I guess. ^_^
