[Other FULL] Vale Institute of Magic (M) (OOC/SU)

[Satan.EXE]

Sign-Up has been withdrawn from the thread.

 

[Songbird]

You do know he's not going to have access to any alcohol or otherwise flammable fluids, right?

 

[Satan.EXE]

He'd be coming with his own (he has been getting it from his father) though if it gets confiscated that's just what happens. Then he and everyone around him are gonna have a bad time.

 

[Impossiperiod]

Is there a posting order for this day, or is it a fresh first come first serve?

 

[Songbird]

Posting order? What's a posting order?

We never really worried about any kind of ordering for posts (most of the RPC doesn't, really), since it's unnecessary to limit people like that, and it really slows things down if a certain someone doesn't post on their turn; it also limits joint posting (where most inter-character fights take place). As long as you don't get too far ahead of everyone else, time-wise, you're free to do as much as you want.

 

[Impossiperiod]

Okay! Thanks for the answer, Song! :)

 

[Nakuzami]

There, made a short post just so you know that Alma's still alive.

Feel free to become one of her victims in order to initiate conversation/confrontation. d:

 

[lucariokul]

Name: Anthony Dragonwind.
Age: 14.
Gender: Male.
Element: Can I have Wind and Water? If not, just Wind.
Spells:
Windsong Embrace (Wind): Cloaks me in a veil of wind that can sweep aside incoming projectiles, including magic, if it is weak enough.
Tidy Tears (Water):Only working when I am crying, my tears are infused with magic and gain healing properties.
Windslash Whip (Wind):Summons a strong gust of wind to knock enemies away, or carry them into the air and drop them from a moderately painful height.

Appearance: I am small, just four feet barely. I have very light skin, and Hazel eyes that go green in the right light. My hair is a mess of brown with streaks of blue and a tuft of black at the front that seems to run in my family. I have long legs, and a minor case of acne on my nose. I wear small, rectangular glasses when I am not using Wind Magic. I am dressed in robes, much to the confusion of my classmates. My robes are bright green. I have a small, barely noticeable earring in my left ear, which is my most prized possession of all.
Personality: I am shy, and don't like being surrounded by lots of noise or people on such occasions I sometimes just bail from the room to escape the tension. I don't trust people easily, but when I do I stick to it like honey. I like to make things, even if they are for decoration alone. I made my own clothes even. But I am a fearsome fighter when I use my magic abilities. I don't enjoy being indoors for too long, I need fresh air a lot, it calms me down. I like to tend to the ill or injured because it makes me feel better about myself. I also am very enthusiastic about cooking food and making medicines, it's the thing I am best at besides perhaps my magic.
History: Before I came to the Vale Institute of Magic, I lived on a tiny island, not visible on the world map. This island is invisible to those who do not live there, which is one of the reasons that the letter had reached me three times, undoubtedly of failed deliveries. This island, off the coast of Australia by the way, was about the size of a small village, a good place to live on my own.
I found some friends in the creatures that lived on the island, and eventually grew fond of them. It was about this time that I learned I could use magic. I was alone like usual (my parents died when I was little), and I was watching the sea, and saw a pearl in the water. I went to inspect it and a riptide pulled me out to sea. By the time I got back, the pearl was gone. I cried, because I was going to sell it for food, because the mangoes that grew on the island was not enough for long. My tears landed on the scab on my hand from two days ago, and I looked at it to discover it had vanished. I could put two and two together that I knew something incredible.
Code: Challenge me!!!
Other: Sometimes carries an onion, so that I can use Tidy Tears easier, always carry 1-6 bottles with corks, in case I need to contain something small.


Is that enough to join? If not, let me know what I did wrong.

 

[Songbird]

You can only have one element, so you'll have to pick one or the other. In addition, I'm afraid your Water spell isn't a Water spell; the name of each element is quite literal—Water Magic is simply water oriented, which does not include healing in any way. The wind spells you listed are off to a decent start, but they need much more detail than you have at the moment—they're way too vague. Ferromancers (metal mages) can create bullets and fire them off faster than a gun; they can make flying swords, and geomancers can throw boulders. What kind of "projectiles" is a magic cloak supposed to repel? A monkey throwing mangoes? How high of a drop is considered "moderately painful" when an aeromancer can levitate, pyromancers can propel themselves on flames, hydromancers can soften their landing, and geomancers and ferromancers can wear armor? There's nothing static or definitive about your spells.

Your character's appearance leaves a lot of unanswered questions, it's unrealistic, and it's inconsistent with his history (which has its own problems). This RP takes place on modern Earth, which also means you have to change his last name. No one is going to be named "Dragonwind". You're not going to have natural blue hair, and if you're living your entire life on an island, you shouldn't be able to out-pale an albino. Why is he four feet tall at fourteen years old? Unless he's a dwarf (the actual medical term for the condition, seriously), he should be roughly five feet tall, and the "long leg" description really contradicts his height. Where do any of his possessions come from, like the glasses and earring? Continuing with the consistency of the roleplay occurring on modern Earth, the redundancy of your character's glasses is... well, redundant. Either the character needs glasses or he doesn't.

On the personality, he should currently have no social skills whatsoever. How could he have possibly socialised? Where did he learn to speak any language, or how to even talk? How does he know how to cook if the only thing he ever ate was mangoes? How does he know how to make medicine? These are all inconsistencies, and you need to make connections.

His history is the most problematic, though, and there are nothing but more questions. He lived his entire life on an uncharted island, invisible (for no viable reason) to anyone that isn't already there. Why was he orphaned? How did he end up on an island that doesn't exist? How does anyone know he exists? What kind of animals would possibly live there? How does he have any sense of economics (selling anything of value) when he spent his entire life on an island no one knows exists? Where did that scab come from?

And the most important question: How did he not die? (Sadly, we will not accept "the animals on the island took care of him.")

There are quite a few holes and contradictions, and honestly, a lot of changes need to be made before Anthony can be accepted. Finally, judging by the size of the SU, it feels like you may face difficulty keeping up with the rest of the players, and you might have problems making sure your posts are consistent.

If you really want to join Vale, you'll have to at least make these changes:

• You can only use one element (meaning Water or Wind), and they need elaboration; a concrete description as to what they can and cannot do. Elements are also taken pretty literally. Water magic does not mean healing magic. It pertains strictly to water and other fluids; nothing else, not even ice.
• His appearance and personality need to be consistent with his history.
• Please change his name to something that would exist in the modern world (again, the RP takes place on Earth in the early 21st century), rather than fantasy.
• His location (and therefore his entire history) needs to be changed. As I've said, it may be a magic RP, but it still takes place on normal, boring Earth, and a deserted, non-existent island means never seeing other human beings.
• Use the five Ws when remaking your signup to make sure there aren't any inconsistencies or holes. Who, what, when, where, why and how. Ask yourself about everything you're typing.

To be completely frank, I don't know if you'd want to just try and change it, because by the time you're done, for better or worse, Anthony isn't going to be anything like he is now, and you may not like the result.

I'm also going to suggest that you try joining an RP that doesn't have such heavy or exacting standards, like the Pokémon Trainer Academy. Chances are you'll find it much more fun, as well. (Not saying Vale isn't fun, but PTA has more active players, and Yellow is a lot nicer than me, so it might be easier to make some friends.)

 

[Grif of Hearts]

Vale Institute of Magic
"You'll be mine before you know it."
✘✘✘​

✘Name
Violett Fuerst-Shaw
✘Age
Seventeen years old.
✘Gender
Female

✘Element
[REDACTED]
✘Spells
Burn for Me: [REDACTED]
Love is Blind: [REDACTED]
Passion's Gaze: [REDACTED]

✘Personality

Above all else, Violett desires one thing; to have the world wrapped around her finger. It is a goal that, to her, she has already set into motion, and every action she takes is dedicated to this.

Violett is a woman perfectly aware of her proficiencies, able to use them to her advantage at a moment's notice. She knows that many find her attractive; her curvaceous figure, remarkably pretty facial features, and soft accent that dances across every word that passes her lips all add an intriguing flare to the way she walks, speaks, and acts, and has never shied away from using these qualities to get whatever she might desire. Through Violett's teenage years she learned to hone her charm and charisma into a knife edge, a lethal weapon of persuasion that rarely fails her. Together, these qualities prove to be just enough to satisfy Violett's craving for attention. If Violett is not surrounded by jealous girls and star-struck boys to shower her in affection then she will seek to make it so, spending every moment plotting to steal the limelight and take her rightful place as the most beautiful and enthralling individual around by any means necessary.

Other than the attention of her peers, Violett feels an equal yearning for amusement. While many things can satisfy this urge she clearly despises normality and, in the event of tediousness, will seek to replace it with energy and excitement. While this may usually be harmless, usually the simple pleasures of a thrilling conversation with one she finds interesting, Violett has been known to cause mischief and chaos where there once was none, all in the sake of her own entertainment. While usually able to deny accountability through a smooth blend of clever wording and unsubtle flirting, those who see through her bluff often spy a jealous woman, driven by a selfish lust and little else. It is true that Violett can be utterly despicable at times, often for no reason other than to satisfy these cravings, but she does not directly seek the harm of other. She only seeks to entertain herself.

✘History

Born in Dortmund, located in the state of North Rhine-Westphalia in western Germany, Violett was raised by two business-savvy entrepreneurs with just a little bit more money than sense. Her father was a German man, nearly seven feet tall and composed almost entirely of muscle, and her mother was a far more delicate French woman of whom Violett is the spitting image of, both of whom were well known for their eccentric demeanour, vibrant personalities, and bizarre sense of charm that set them apart from their neighbours. They served as Violett's inspiration and encouragement from the moment she was born, perfect role models for the young girl as she grew up. In her opinion they were, and still are, the two greatest people that she knows.

Violett only remembers glimpses of her earlier years in Germany though. With her mother's family settled in Alsace-Lorraine, specifically Strasbourg, it was not uncommon to make regular trips over the border between France and Germany to meet with relatives. As Violett's grandmother on her mother's side grew ill, spurred on by the various issues that come with old age, these meetings became more and more frequent in an attempt to reconnect the family in what time they had left. These trips were long and difficult though, especially with a small child, but as the health of Violett's grandmother continued to deteriorate it was decided that it would be best to spend as much time with her as possible. The Fuerst-Shaw family planned to move, abandoning its roots in Germany to move to Strasbourg and hopefully find a pleasant little home to settle down in. They did in fact move with Violett only five years old at the time, finding a small house for near the centre of the city and moving in the month after they bought it. Violett was raised in Strasbourg for almost her entire life.

Despite an upbringing in France, Violett still considered herself to be more German than French, partly due to the prominence of the German culture and language in Strasbourg but also because she realised it set her apart from those of her age in the city, carrying a slightly different accent and different mannerisms than they did. It was from a young age she realised that she carried a craving for uniqueness and attention, using the intrigue to become a flourishing socialite through her school years despite her flaws.

The first experience the young girl had of magic, a universal force that can grant human beings amazing abilities, was when she was seven years old. Her father, unbeknownst to her, had been one of the few that carried down a genetic disposition towards a specific element, in this case [REDACTED]. She had been passed on this gene, taking on the proficiency with water magic that he displayed. Violett was intrigued, an avid fan of all things mystical and mysterious, and through her father's tutelage she began to develop these magical abilities. Her mother had little part in this with no magical knowledge herself, but offered support and encouragement throughout Violett's training. However, the young girl, after delving into magical lore in greater depth, discovered aspects of it that entertained her far more than her father's abilities could.

[REDACTED]

Violett's abilities were never vast, being only an apprentice magician herself with nobody to teach her properly in her new art, but her father saw great promise in her abilities. He contacted Vale, an academy specifically designed to hone magical abilities in a safe and open environment, and attempted to secure her a place at the facility. As it happened, her father was not the only one who had seen potential in Violett's abilities, as she was already on the list of candidates for new students. She received a letter to join one week afterwards, an opportunity she quickly jumped upon.

✘Code
"Challenge me, sweetie… I dare you."

✘Other
​

 

[Songbird]

Since you, Colony and I already worked quite literally everything out in PMs, Grif is acceptified.

Go ahead and make your first post to begin Violett's second day at Vale. :3

 

[Colony]

Come on, everybody, post! Or say something in the OOC, at least... Songbird and I are working on a post that will progress the day into the first class of the day, just to give everyone a heads up, so be ready for it.

 

[eeveeandmew]

im in for this my su will be done soon. im going to be earth magic if that is okay.

 

[Colony]

Woo, can't wait to see what you come up with.

 

[eeveeandmew]

old su that was bad

Spoiler:

Name: Heather Jones

Nickname: Leaf (Because heather is a plant)

Age: 16

Gender: Female

Element: Earth

Spells:

Instincts~ For a short period of time, this makes the her able to move 2x as fast and attack 1.5x as hard, but makes damage taken double.

Sprout~ Causes over sized and very fast Venus flytraps to appear in a circle around herself, protecting her from attackers until they are destroyed or if three minutes pass. If their leaves are plucked by someone who knows earth magic, It will heal them at the cost of damaging the plant, effectively draining 1/3 the flytrap's power per leaf.

Rose Shot~ A cloud of large rose thorns are fired at a target. Most of the time, they are shot at a targets feet to immobilize them. If shot at a wall, they can be climbed on. They fade after ten minutes if shot at a wall. If a non-earth user climbs them, there is a 50% chance of being damaged every thorn you touch.

Appearance:

Personality: Heather Jones is a nice girl once you get to know her. At first, she appears to be the kind of girl who would stay away from others, as she looks small and frail. She uses this to her advantage and at first people she meets feel sorry for her. After a quick chat, you would know she is very popular in her hometown and wants to do nothing more than hang out with some friends. There is only one thing she hates, and that is someone better with magic than her. If you make her angry, there is no stopping her. Then again, it is hard to get her upset in the fist place.

History: When she was 3, she was caught in a flood that wiped out her home, and her family. As she was washed southward, a tree bent and picked her out of the water. Another tree reached for her mother, but was a split second too late, and she was pulled under the water and drowned. The trees just managed to save her 7 year old brother, who is the person who took care of her, alone in the woods. When she was 8, she found a small village who offered her and her brother a place to stay. As she sat in there new garden, planting some special green roses, a stranger walked toward her. Her roses reacted to her fright and fired thorns at the man. The man fell on the ground, dropping a knife that disappeared into nothing. His feet still pierced by thorns, he ran away. Heather decided that there was something different about her, and her green roses. Concentrating, she willed the roses to shoot at her fence. As she hoped, they did as she wanted. The mayor of the town said she could control magic, just as she believed. As she grew older, she practiced more and more as she dreamed of being some use somewhere.
Code: Challenge me!!!

Other: none

 

[Songbird]

I'm sorry to tell you this, but a major problem with your SU that completely ruins everything and requires you to scrap the history as a whole: trees aren't conscious. They can't rescue her. They can't actively rescue anyone. I can go more in-depth as a GM towards your SU, but since that's such a glaring issue and will force you to redo pretty much the entire thing, I'll only tell you of any other problems on request. Please read through the other SUs (and the reviews Colony and I have posted) so you can get an idea of what can and can't happen.

 

[Colony]

What my cohort is trying to say is that Vale is unlike other forms of magic settings. It's very much based in reality, as magic only serves as a tool, which is why the public is still unaware of the existence of magic. Songbird is right, though. There are a some important changes that need to occur before the SU can be accepted. Plants being sentient is one of the big problems, as it goes against the realistic setting of Vale. Secondly, elements are extremely literal in their usage in Vale. Earth solely involves rocks, dirt, etc., and not plants, so Heather's spells aren't actually in-line with her element. As a sort of side note on the spells, I really like the creativity, but some of the spells have a real bad balancing issue. Remember, spells can be strong, but they must have a consequence. If it seems strong, there's almost always a negative effect on the user, such as cuts, burns, contusions, etc. Hope that helps.

 

[eeveeandmew]

she was using her magic without realizing it. did i word that poorly or what X.X ill try again tommorrow when i have 2 more hours to work on it.

 

[tenthcompanion]

Hello all :) I've been sneaking around this thread for the past couple days and I think I've finally come up with a character idea... ish. I'll have my SU fully completed sometime tomorrow.

SU is now complete!

Spoiler:

Name: Guinevere Octavia Queen
Nickname: Gwen (Her childhood nicknames were "Princess" or "Queenie", but if you address her with one of these you might just get punched in the face.)
Gender: Female
Age: 15

Element: Fire

Spells:
Excalibur – Every hero needs a good sword, Gwen's just happens to be made out of fire. Drawing from the same Arthurian legend as her namesake, she summons a longsword made from pure fire into her right hand. Excalibur isn't made of physical material, so it cannot strike or deflect like a real sword would. Instead, each slice of the sword sends out a thin line of fire at the opponent. (Gwen can turn the blade into solid flames, but can only maintain it for a short period of time.)

Fire Flight – Using quick fire blasts emitted from her hands and/or feet, Gwen can use the explosive energy to propel herself higher and farther than normal. This spell can be used both to enhance her speed and to give her more lift while jumping. If she finds herself falling from high up she can also use a similar fire blast to slow her momentum and cushion her fall. Recently she has been practicing jumping high into the air using consecutive fire blasts but it has been proving rather difficult. (A quick fire blast can be used as an offensive attack in a pinch but she will mainly use Excalibur for her attacks.)

Dragonfire – This spell is by far Gwen's most powerful and most "epic", as she likes to put it. She summons a ring of fire around herself and raises the flames up to be as tall as she is, serving as a barrier between her and anyone who dares get too close. Additionally, she can shape the flames into a long, serpentine dragon that can glide over and attack her enemies. The barrier and the dragon are made from the same fire, therefore Gwen cannot defend and attack at the same time. No other spell can be active when Dragonfire is in use. This spell requires much concentration and cannot be maintained for a long period of time.

Personality: Stubborn, competitive, loud… these are probably the first things that come to mind when thinking of Gwen. She's a girl with a single purpose in life: to become (in her own words) a "kick-ass fire powered superhero". After years of reading young-adult fantasy novels and playing countless video games, Gwen has become completely enamored with the fantasy realm. Dragons, heroes, kings and queens, evil villains in disguise… everything. Magic makes her feel like she can be a part of those impossible worlds and there is nothing that she wants more.

Gwen is a very bright girl, but unfortunately she lacks the motivation to do any studying. What's the point of learning algebra when she could be off saving virtual worlds instead? Now that she's been accepted into Vale it will be very difficult for her teachers to keep her in the classroom and off the practice grounds. In addition, she is stubborn and competitive to a fault and will not accept defeat easily. Honestly she probably won't even accept defeat when she's lying immobile on the ground.

Gwen is never afraid to speak her mind and she'll always give her opinion whether it was asked for or not. Her loud and somewhat aggressive personality type often rubs people the wrong way so her friends tend to come and go quickly. However, if you stick around long enough you might discover the positive aspects of Gwen's personality. Her competitiveness turns into a burning passion; her stubborn nature reveals perseverance in the face of any obstacle. She is loud because she wants to be heard and to be able to have a say in this huge world. If you can get past her abrasive first impression, Gwen is a kind and loyal friend who is worth having around.

History: Gwen was born into an average little family who live an average little town. The only notable thing about the Queen family (apart from their daughter being able to produce fire at will) is that the children have highly unusual names. Guinevere Octavia is the eldest and only daughter, and her brother Percival Augustus is the youngest. Luckily their names are easily shortened to "Gwen" and "Percy" so they can't complain to their parents too much. Gwen's parents are both history teachers, one at the local university and another at her high school, which explains why their children are named after famous Arthurian and Roman figures. To their dismay, Gwen has never shared their love of learning and has been occasionally skipping classes ever since she started middle school. At first, they tried taking away her books and games in order to force her to finish her homework and attend classes, but that only resulted in an unhappy daughter and equally unhappy parents. Middle school was also the time when Gwen started to manifest her powers so angry Gwen was considerably more dangerous than most teens. Eventually her parents cooked up an idea that actually worked and gave their daughter an incentive to learn… sometimes. Since Gwen loved fantasy so much, they decided to delve into their history books and look for all the interesting myths and legends they could find. Instead of depriving her of fantasy, they would reward her good behavior with awesome and foreign tales of magic and monsters.

Even though her academics were somewhat improved thanks to the love and care (and bribery?) of her parents, school was still not a happy place for Gwen. There were more problems to deal with than just attending classes. No… not the sudden appearance of her magical abilities. That wasn't a "problem" to Gwen – it was freaking awesome! It was her classmates at school that she had to deal with. Ever since elementary school, she always had her nose stuck in a book and her eyes stuck to a computer screen. This asocial, daydreaming personality – coupled with her "stupid" (according to some of her classmates) name – turned her into the outcast weird kid at school. By the time middle school rolled around Gwen had had enough of the teasing so she decided to fight back. Literally. "You wanna call me Nerd Girl again? Princess of LaLa Land? Go on, I dare you." Obviously this aggressive attitude and physical retaliation didn't go over well with her teachers and she's found herself in detention on more than one occasion. Gwen has been relatively detention-free this past year but that's only because her peers learned to back off. Of course this also means that Gwen has essentially zero friends…

Now that she's been accepted into Vale, Gwen hopes to leave the troublesome past behind her and maybe make some real friends. That is, in between reading, gaming, and honing her fire-wielding abilities.

Code: What're you lookin' at? You wanna challenge me or something?

Other: While Gwen is most interested in perfecting her fire magic, recently she's shown some interest in learning some other, more defensive magic. Earth, maybe?​

 

[disciplish]

she was using her magic without realizing it. did i word that poorly or what X.X ill try again tommorrow when i have 2 more hours to work on it.

The problem is probably the wording. If you had made it clear that she was using it, then I don't think there'd be a problem on that front. although you got ninja'd anyways and told that you can't used plant-based spells to begin with, so I dunno if that deters you now or something

Anyways, Colony [and Birdy too :3], will I be RPing some of the duels involving sophomores due to me using 'Mari? I think it could be fun, but I'm quickly getting to the point where AP exams are in May and activity will plummet for two weeks or something for me. Not soon soon, but in about a month~