View Full Version : Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Void Break

July 13th, 2008, 6:52 AM
Prolouge: http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/7528/prolougegm0.png
Episode 1: http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/4361/episode1iw0.png Impossible!
Prolouge: http://img137.imageshack.us/img137/5580/prolouge2bm9.png
Episode 2: http://img149.imageshack.us/img149/6139/episode2sr6.png Transmisson (look very carefully at frame 1 and 2)
Episode 3: http://img87.imageshack.us/img87/1204/episode3lw1.png Earthquake?!
Epsiode 4: http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/1725/episode4uc9.png The Base (Look VERY carefully at frame 4)
Episode 5: http://img66.imageshack.us/img66/4415/episode5ll6.png The Two Way Force Field
Episode 6: http://img227.imageshack.us/img227/1307/episode6yw2.png Weavile and Sneasile Snatchers

I have had a few comics in the past but they weren't that much of a hit. I hope this one is better. Please post your comments and please tell me how I could improve.

BIG HUMONGOUS Thanx 2 Aoh Nay for some of the landscape Sprites :D

July 13th, 2008, 7:06 AM
Can Darkly be in this comic?

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
July 13th, 2008, 7:09 AM
Hm... I will stay tuned to see what happens next.
a rip in the universe seems like destructive fun >:D

you forgot the K in "know", but that's only a simple spelling mistake.
do what I do.

use spell check in microsoft word.

can't wait to see where this is going...

July 13th, 2008, 7:21 AM
The whole point I made this sprite comic is so I could destroy stuff :D YAY!!! it's gonna include alot of Legnedary Pokemon and loads of destruction... I'm currently working on the first episode.

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
July 13th, 2008, 7:23 AM
The whole point I made this sprite comic is so I could destroy stuff :D YAY!!! it's gonna include alot of Legnedary Pokemon and loads of destruction... I'm currently working on the first episode.


I'm glad someone finally said "screw it" and made a comic full of destruction and lengendaries.

Good luck with it.

July 13th, 2008, 8:42 AM
There's the next episode up ^.^ hope u guyz lyk it :D

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
July 13th, 2008, 8:47 AM

You could work on text bubbles.
amybe a little more text could be used for better understanding.
but besides that, your going on the right track. :P

July 13th, 2008, 9:03 AM
It was only a little episode which explained that space looked different so it didn't contain that much speach so it could build suspense... There's some spoilers below so read them if you wanna find out what happens next

There will be alot of destruction in the first chapter and in the second chapter Deoxys will appear on earth. There will be an episode in the first chapter and it will be of Kyogre and Groudon fighting... Oh and the Earth just moved

July 13th, 2008, 12:49 PM
Work on your grammar and spelling. Mainly, that's all. You might also want to not confuse us and explain via dialog a bit more, and have some sort of plot twist. Having Deoxys (Any other legendary) fight the rest of the legends combined and winning while some chosen one is elected is a tad overused. So don't do that :]

Good luck, you also might want to make sure you credit people from whom you borrowed stuff. K?

July 15th, 2008, 2:54 AM

i think it's pretty good, i mean the sprites are actually looking at the sky, and the void looks cool

i want more!

July 19th, 2008, 6:38 AM
I Know it's another Prolouge but they're only really there to explain stuff so don't get worried as there won't be many of them...

Hope you likey :D

July 19th, 2008, 8:44 AM
Work on textbubbles! That's really important. If someone doesn't like the way the text is displayed, then they probably won't read it.

Secondly, google up some tutorials on how to make proper fight scenes using sprites. Seeing as you have MS Paint, you're going to need a miracle to pull off effects. By doing this, you can make your upcoming GroudonxKyogre battle more epic-like and less bland.

Also, try to stick with Mystery Dungeon backgrounds instead of the GBA ones. They look bad if placed with the wrong sizes. For example, Lucario was way too big around all of those trees. If you haven't been, go to the Spriters Resource for backgrounds. They have a ton for Mystery dungeon. If you have been there, then stick to those.

And another thing, MS Paint has the most useful ability to resize sprites correctly. If you don't know, open MS Paint-Image-Stretch/Skew. (Control + W works also.) It should be a small window, where it says stretch, you can use 200/300/400/500. (ONLY THESE. OTHERS WILL DISTORT THE SPRITE) (And type the same two numbers in both boxes under the stretch option. At the bottom where it says Skew just leave alone.) By doing this nifty feature, you can make panels that are zoomed in. Adds more detail, trust me.

Don't be discouraged though. I was merely trying to help you out. I'm sorry that I killed your buzz by being the one to type a long list of complaints. It's just, I know how it feels when you think you're doing great and some guy pretty much says you're doing it all wrong. In my case though, they never help. I'm trying to help you improve. So, good luck with the comic. I hope you improve.

July 19th, 2008, 8:55 AM
Thanks alot :)!!! The reason I didn't resize Lucario is because I knew it would get disroted... I've been on spriters resource (thats where I get most of my sprites) and I have already made some Battle Backgrounds but not many Move Templates :S... Thanks for being honest... You've really helped :)

July 19th, 2008, 8:57 AM
No pro-blem-o. Just follow that small little post up there and you can resize without worrying about distortion.

July 19th, 2008, 10:55 AM
There's the next episode (look carefully at the first and second frame) it's just a little one... Oh and I've got new software so my comics are gonna be better from now on :)...

July 19th, 2008, 11:15 AM
Those r pretty kool! :)
I look forward to see some more. =)
GL! =D

July 20th, 2008, 3:29 AM
Thanks Eveeon and Estooz. There's the next one up :) I thinks it the best one yet in terms of Graphics... Enjoy ^.^

July 22nd, 2008, 7:44 AM
Wow, that's pretty good. If it made me want to see more, that's pretty good.

July 22nd, 2008, 6:33 PM
Wow this is really good.
But wouldnt you think Palkia would get really mad if space got ripped?
Oh and add Darkrai :D
Other than that really good!
I'm staying tuned.

July 22nd, 2008, 8:55 PM
I really like this. :)
I don't understand what happened to Lucario though. :\
He just randomly gets warped. :\

July 25th, 2008, 11:12 AM
Thanks Eeveeon and I drum. The Lucario bit will be explained in the NEW chapter. In the new chapter it will focus on individual characters for about 3 or 4 episodes. It will explain some of there past and what's gonna happen next. It will be in a weird time order though. It will tell one Pokemon story and then tell another Pokemons story from the very begining. There will also be more clues on this mysterious Pokemon that tends to appear so keep your eyes peeled (OW!)

July 29th, 2008, 4:47 PM
i like the chacter and the sprites keep up the good work

August 3rd, 2008, 5:50 AM
Thanks Aggronomer :)

There's the next Episode up

It has the first fighting scene in ^^

And sorry I haven't posted for a while, I'm beging to lose interest as no one is posting comments :(

August 4th, 2008, 4:25 PM
hahahaha! Trika Strikes! the last page is cool

August 7th, 2008, 6:49 AM
Thanks Darkly ^^

Yup thats the mysterious Pokemon and his team.

More will be explained on him Later.

August 9th, 2008, 6:55 AM
This is pretty good! Kinda confusing though, but I expect stuff will be explained later on.

Oh, and episode 4, I think you mean the "whole of Pokemon Square", not the "hole of Pokemon Square".

August 9th, 2008, 6:58 AM
Thanks Lusankya :)

Yer, I sometimes write to fast and dont look over what I put :D lol

September 11th, 2008, 6:34 PM
shame to see this has died

Unknown Entity
September 11th, 2008, 11:44 PM
shame to see this has died

If it died, why bother posting in it?
The point of posting in a dead thread stating the obvious "Good gravy it's dead!"
...is well...Pointless. ( yes I ripped that off from "Good gravy it's Google!" xD ) now if someone is going to post stating that my posting this is pointless, well it probably is, seeing as how the person I'm quoting probably isn't going to see this.( It's 3:44am , I'm Bored, and can't sleep, So Don't Contradict me. >.> )