pokemon battelers

[BurstX]

ok this is my first comic ever...so here we go you better love these and if you dont too bad ^_^

POKEMON BATTELERS



Character Bios:

COMICS:

Spoiler:

The Journey Begins pt1
The Journey Begins pt 2
The Journey Begins pt 3
Now We're Getting Somewhere...Sort-of
Pokemon Battelers
Introductions
Island Eight
New Recruit

CUSTOM MAPS

Spoiler:

batteler base

Eight Island

Contest Hall

credits:
the spriters resource
sweetsmoochum from pokecharms
pokesho

LATEST COMIC:

 

[Weatherman Kiyoshi]

hm...
as I said through PM before,

work on these:

1. Chariters
2. Plot
3. Effects
4. Layout

k?

I'm sure this will be atleast interesting. ^^

 

[BurstX]

ok well here it is omic two... and three

The Journey Begins pt 2
The Journey Begins pt 3
and starting with comic four i will make six panles...okay have fun reading

 

[[NovaPirate]]

Work on grammar. Periods, capitalizations, spelling.
Stop using periods. It really gets annoying after the third speech bubble in one panel with '...'

Don't mix styles. Styles are like Vinegar, Oil, and Water. Fr/Lg stays with Fr/Lg, RSE stays with RSE, and MD stays with MD. They don't like to be mixed up. That includes maps, sprites, etc.

And 'Battelers' is actually 'Battlers'.

 

[BurstX]

...i like the use of md sprites...and idont really plan on scratching all the sprites of pokemon i need...also i spelt it wriong for a reason that you will find out later in the comic...um as for the use of fr/lg sprites...other than places i wont be mixing ows again...so i think that solves all the problems

 

[[NovaPirate]]

You purposely put periods right there, didn't you.
Anyways, you still haven't said anything about the periods or grammar. Are you going to address those?

 

[BurstX]

...yes my grammer will get better...but the periods symbolize a pause...not just a ...um i guess i could use a comma, so ill probably start that...i hope that helped

BIG UPDATE CHARACTER BIOS ARE UP

 

[Weatherman Kiyoshi]

hm...

Your chariters bios are just sprites,

but since you sent to the new full ones through PM,
I have to say the bio text needs to be bigger. I could barely read it.

Keep up with the comic, Burst.

 

[BurstX]

...you have to click them...then it goes to the bio...but i will make the text bigger...also comic 4 will be out by the end of the weekend

EDIT:...um sorry for not getting the comic up...its not like people care...T.T well if you peopl;e want you can make a character for the comic...also you have to click the sprites to go to the bios...

...ok im making a new post because i feel like it yell at me later
heres
comic 4 now we're getting somewhere...sort of

EDIT: HERES COMIC FIVE Pokemon Battelers
also edited bios are up

 

[Weatherman Kiyoshi]

hm... intresting.

I'm curious what these battlers are.
keep up the nice work, Burst.

 

[[NovaPirate]]

Did you seriously say 'That's the cool way to spell it.'
Could you at least have come up with a reasonable excuse? Maybe make it a joke/pun that reoccur (like the bad guy/rival/random person/Pokemon comes and asks the same question).

And you need to explain why he took him to the Batteler HQ. 'Like, I just decided to take you to our Secret HQ for kicks. Because we have nothing better to do.'
Also, if you're going to spell Battlers wrong, I suggest yo spell it wrong all the time.

Work on your capitalizations some more as well.
Good luck!

 

[BurstX]

ok guys heres an update on the battelers

blue batteler specializing in water types, he has a wailmer mantine, and mudkip

red batteler, specializing in fire types, he has magmar and torchick

black batteler, specializing in ghost and dark types, he has banette shuppet and duskull

yellow batteler, specializing in electirc types, she has pikachu and magnazone

the pink batteler, specializing in normal types, she has delcatty porygon and aipom

the pokemon battelers headquarters

 

[Weatherman Kiyoshi]

to tell you the truth, the battlers are almost similar to the power rangers. XD

but they're neat, can't wait for the next comic.

 

[BurstX]

...lol they are actually based off the power rangers...yeah i was bored

 

[Weatherman Kiyoshi]

...lol they are actually based off the power rangers...yeah i was bored

Check out Abby's FC.

I asked if you wanted me to fix your OWs for the battlers.

 

[BurstX]

thanks achy that would be cool if you had some ideas for them

 

[Weatherman Kiyoshi]

when I'm done, can I use them too for my comic?

 

[Mike2494]

I dont know why, but I really like it...I love it how you put the Pokemon into the base, they are from Mystery Dungeon, right?

 

[BurstX]

yup all tyhe pokemon ows are pmd and the trainers are all r/s/e the places are fr/lg and r/s/e in some cases

 

[Charchic]

I think the comic is really good and quite funny. But there is one problem. You told us there is a reason for the mistake in the word Battelers. And the reason just looks like you thought, "Upps. I made a mistake, better make up a cheesy way to cover this up now!!!!" And it doesn't really please the reader, it's a bit dull. And I don't really like the Battelers. But there is one great thing. The backgrounds. Did you make that base yourself! Cos it looks really good.