Recent content by aceupthesleeve

Buoysel, Xanthine was correct, I'm not from America, hence the different spelling. Regardless of this, thankyou for pointing them out, the corrections were greatly appreciated despite this. I'm very glad you're enjoying it, and you shant have to wait too much longer for the next chappie.

Chapter 2 Chapter 2 Where am I? Her parched throat burnt, her lips were cracked and dry, and her skin was clammy with sweat. Regardless of these drawbacks, June felt oddly comfortable where she lay. Though, the question as to where it was that she lay, she didn’t know the answer to...

Thanks Buoysel, It's nice to know that my writing and grammar is spot on, *Warm fuzzies*. :P, and I'm glad to know that my story has grasped your attention as well. ~aceupthesleeve

Chapter 1 Life's Little Adaptations Chapter 1 The path June had chosen was not an easy one; but then, she’d known that it wouldn’t be from the very start. Despite her discomfort, she pushed on. The luscious canopy of trees blotched out the sky and shielded her from the sun’s rays. With...

Matt-Man123, it's not, it's supposed to be rivaling, as in his dark smile was almost darker than the actual room, (Sorry, that's probably not the best explanation.) But, now that I think about it, saying that it rivaled the darkness probably wasn't the best choice of words. Thanks for that.

Life’s Little Adaptations Desclaimer: I, obviously, dont own Pokemon. If I make any mistakes regarding the pokemon or the world in which they live it would be greatly appreciated if somebody let me know. Also, I know that this is short, and I wont make it a habit in the future to post...

It's always terrifying when something so powerful is so easily detroyed by something so small and meager. I like your style of writing and the dark edge to the story so far. Cant wait for more, ;p

That was very original, seen through the eyes of someone completely new and different. It was well written and there weren't too many gramatical errors. Reading your fan fics has really opened my eyes to some of the finer points in the pokemon world, such as all the work that's put nto training...

That was beautiful, it's never occured to me to give even a moments thought to all the pokemon that have gone straight from being captured to the PC. Expecially those, like the cubone, who were captured with only the barest of HP left before being sent off to a computer. I really liked that...

Capital letters are always important; something I noticed you were lacking immediatly. You need them for the names of pokemon, places, and every time you start a new sentence or somebody new talks. Prehaps -like An-Chan said- you might consider giving a bit more of a description on what each...

You need to both extend the length of the chapter and be sure to read over your work before posting. Perhaps writing it up in a program like Microsoft Word before posting will help, the spell check can pick up what you have not. Also, dont just say what the attack's name is, describe the...

A very interesting and original storyline. I found nothing wrong with either it nor your writing style that hasn't aleady been pointed out. I look forward to more.

I liked his theory about the last pick, it's always been such a cliché truth. Typical it didn't apply now that he wanted it to. I found a few grammatical and spelling errors within the first few paragrahs, but after that there weren't many. I wrote the proper spelling/tence here...

You've trully opened my eyes to different writting styles. The technique of writting using "you" and not giving the character an identity set in stone, has left so many possibilities open, letting the reader descide upon some things themself. It was very beautiful, bringing both tears to my...

That was absolutely beautiful; and about Charizard, no less. I tend to steer clear from anything written in 'you' form, bit it all just seemed so fitting. It wouldn't have been complete written any other way, I don’t think. It just added that something extra; making it all the more original...