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1) Which is a better name, Vicki, or the one I originally thought about, Vici? Possibly her true name could be Vicki, but she writes her name as "Vici", showing a determination for originality? 2) Should Vicki's parents have a role in this? Would you want to know about her parents? Should they...

Chapter Seven of The Hoenn Empire is up.

Chapter Seven: True Power A little auburn-haired six-year old pranced around the school garden, jubilance galore. There were rose bushes, lush grass, and fences small enough to climb on; the world was a playground: so many games, so much fun to be had, so little time. The only thing more that...

Should be "Hello, I am Prof. Birch". You make this mistake a couple of sentences later, as well. I also think it would look tidier if you used "Professor" rather than "Prof." Should be "Weren't there three Pokémon?" Should be "intrigued". Should be "atop its head,' " Should be "I've". One...

Lukespade, cliches aren't always a weakness, if used sparingly and properly - so don't worry about the necessity of including some of them. It is only when a story is riddled with cliches so that it detracts (or substitutes) the originality of the story that cliches are a problem.

Do you think they have holidays in the Pokemon world? Have you/Are you going to put any holidays in your fic? Such a concept is perfectly plausible, considering that it seems to be in our nature to invent holidays, and across many cultures, we can see their existence, so I doubt the existence of...

The first two paragraphs of the prologue, I must say, are masterfully written. I really enjoyed reading them. :D The rest of the prologue is also flawless - I cannot suggest anything for it. Very interesting that Oak is acting suspiciously, and you have presented it in a way in which I do not...

One thing I really admire about this is your ability to keep me interested. If you can produce chapters of a similar quality to this one in the future, I would agree that this is your niche. :) One small problem I had was here. Maybe it's just me, but I prefer a description of the attack...

Of the two, my guess is that the reckless, unlucky one will give you more room to write an interesting story. It will certainly make the desire to perform a time-travel adventure more plausible (a depressed one is more likely to be defeatist about it), and the unlucky aspect is likely to give...

After having some family problems, I have decided to return to PC and continue this story. :D I come bearing two gifts: a summary of the events thus far (for those that want to refresh their memory but don't want to have to reread everything again), and Chapter Six (which, I'm afraid, may be a...

Good indirect way of saying it. ^^ Great statement of opinion for her. :D I think "she" would be better than "Alexia" here. A great chapter that was superior in quality to the last. If only it could've been a little longer. ^^; But otherwise, a great chapter.

I certainly hope I don't. In those situations, the only description that would occur would be an adjective that directly precedes a noun, eg. "the blue wing struck...", and any more detailed imagery would not occur mid-action. Interesting perspective. Not mine, but I suppose that's because I...

Excellent. ^^ Then it had exactly the effect I wanted. :D I agree. Thanks for the advice. ^^ That's good, because the infinite_POWAH_my_starter_beats_ur_legendary type trainer is the type I want to avoid. Watson's skilled, but not to the level of ridiculousness. Thanks for the review...

A younger brother and younger sister. I'm not particularly close with either of them, though they both are beyond the "little kid" stage. This is both beneficial and detrimental: while they are less inclined to annoy me, it's harder for me to manipulate them.

Thank you very much. ^^ I appreciate the compliment. Exactly. If you'll recall from earlier chapters, Watson once had his thigh sliced open by a scyther as a small child, and now he was to project hid punishment as a child upon another. I did try to get across the effect that Watson thought it...