OnlyMaster101

Look, I do admit I was harsh, but you do need to improve. Please listen to us when we give you reviews. I was harsh because giving you positive reviews might not have gotten the point through. Lash is right, so listen to him.

I got some more advice for ya: Don't give up. The fact that I was a little bit of a prick right there, but you took the constructive criticism well, I do respect that.

Just work on your story a lot. For good fanfiction reference, I would recommend reading anything by Bay, Jax, or DarkPersian479.

You call this better, when you can't even comprehend how to spell Chikorita, or that when starting a new paragraph (if anything in there could be considered one), you need to hit enter twice. Take time when writing your chapter(s), make it actually sound good, and paint a good image in the readers head. I can guarantee you, no one, and I mean no one can get a good image when reading the abomination called WALL OF TEXT. Which happens when you only hit enter once.