Your post seemed pretty good, and it was lengthy, which can especially help out. However, going over it and fixing grammatical mistakes can really help your chances. I'm not the best person to say this since I never go over it myself, but hope you do. You had just a few grammar problems and sometimes didn't add a . or , after you used " ". Going over it will certainly help! Our RP master isn't the type of person to say, "Oh, that person writes a bit better than that person so I suppose they can have it", so that should help... Uhg, I'm sorry, I began to rant, but I usually do that when I give a constructive critism... It's just something I like to do. Yea, so I hope this does help and you get that pokemon!