Um... Could you please make it much longer? It's not because I'm mean, but Alter Ego (or any Super Mod.) doesn't like those kinds of posts, and I don't want you getting infracted or having my RP shut down ^^' If you want, you can look at the posts on some other RPs to see the average length of posts, then work with yours to get it to be similar to those.
I only wish to help ^^