Pokemon poems

Dulcet said:

I'm not sure what 'shinnying' is supposed to mean :/
But other than that good poem ^^

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sorry a big spelling mistake :(

it was surrpose to be 'shiny' blue

Not a bad poem on the Froslass - neat that you went with speculating if it is nice or not. There's some parts that felt a bit off to me here and there:

Froslass peom

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poem. =p

Froslass a Pokémon that snows

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I feel a comma or colon could go after 'Froslass' there, personally.

If it as nice as can be
Or it will poison your tea! QUOTE]
The second line sounds a bit off to me - maybe 'Or if it will...' I also think perhaps a different example of something bad it could do that relates to it more (as in, instead of poisoning tea, freezing someone/thing would make more sense, imo). Of course you went for rhyming here so something that goes with 'be' would be needed I suppose.

A Pokémon with a mystery unsolved
It wears its mask and shall never evolve

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As you went with rhyming all the other lines, I'll also point out that these two don't work out with the 'unsolved/evolve' bit (maybe 'It wears its mask and is a Snorunt evolved'...? Or the first line changed instead to something like 'This Pokemon's mystery is one you shaln't solve')

As a beside, Froslass is also a Pokemon that can only be female, so maybe adding that in and hence replacing the it/s with she, her, her's, etc would be something to consider?

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Eevee

A Pokémon that evolves to the trainers needs
To a leafeon a lover of seeds
Or a flareon with a love for a couch
Or an umbreon which will make you go "ouch"
Or an glaceon with an coat of beauty
Or an vaporeon with is no way snooty
Or an jolteon with electrifyingly cool
Or an espeon that is no way cruel
Or just never evolve it
As this Pokémon has no limit
It can be whatever you want it to be
Whatever you think is 'me'
Whenever it's cool or cute
Whenever it's good or steals loot
Eevee is the perfect Pokémon for anyone
And the perfect friend for any Pokémon!


here you go dulcet enjoy :D

remember i am doing request on anything pokemon related e.g. pokeballs, pokemon, items, chainsaw meowth...

bobandbill said:

Not a bad poem on the Froslass - neat that you went with speculating if it is nice or not. There's some parts that felt a bit off to me here and there:
poem. =p

I feel a comma or colon could go after 'Froslass' there, personally.

If it as nice as can be
Or it will poison your tea! QUOTE]
The second line sounds a bit off to me - maybe 'Or if it will...' I also think perhaps a different example of something bad it could do that relates to it more (as in, instead of poisoning tea, freezing someone/thing would make more sense, imo). Of course you went for rhyming here so something that goes with 'be' would be needed I suppose.
As you went with rhyming all the other lines, I'll also point out that these two don't work out with the 'unsolved/evolve' bit (maybe 'It wears its mask and is a Snorunt evolved'...? Or the first line changed instead to something like 'This Pokemon's mystery is one you shaln't solve')

As a beside, Froslass is also a Pokemon that can only be female, so maybe adding that in and hence replacing the it/s with she, her, her's, etc would be something to consider?

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thank you for your advice i will make the change and repost it

if you have any requests please post!

here is the changed frostlass peom


Froslass, a Pokémon that snows
But behind its mask nobody knows
If it as nice as can be
Or if it will poison your tea!
A Pokémon of white and clear beauty
That goes though life with a duty
Or someone who hides behind a mask
And to steal Pokémon is its task
A Pokémon with a mystery unsolved
It wears its mask and fully evolved
Froslass, a Pokémon that snows
But behind its mask nobody knows...


please request!

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great dulcet i'm gald that i've reached your expections :D

Meanwhile, I will give some haikus an on-the-spot try on Eevee myself...kinda. =p Random idea I had. Hopefully the late hour did not affect my syllable-counting skills. XD

Pfft amused Meerfall had a similar idea to mention its evolutions. XD But I suppose it is a very notable feature of Eevee.



Decisions

Decisions to make.
Unsure which is best for him,
My little Eevee.

Seven paths to choose.
Seven ways to make him strong,
Helpful, and useful.

Maybe this booklet,
On what type to consider,
Shall help me decide.

The way of water?
The ability to swim,
Would be rather neat.

But... we'd need a pool.
And truth be told those blue fins,
Look quite weird to me.

Electricity...
He could zap his opponents,
And dash very fast.

But... if he is hugged,
Is surprised, and shocks someone?
That would be quite lame.

Fire is good for fights!
He could also keep us warm,
During camping trips.

But... flames are not safe,
And I would hate for the tent,
Be ashes instead.

Grass is a nice type.
He would enjoy the garden,
And the forest too.

But... when winter comes,
He would find it rather dull,
And that would not do.

Speaking of winter,
That season is made for Ice,
And we'd have snow fights!

But... the downside is,
Summer would be the time he'd hate!
He would be too hot.

Psychic has its pros...
He could tell me other's thoughts
And trick people too.

But... the sad thing is,
He could read all my thoughts too.
I like privacy.

Dark is pretty cool.
He would make Hide and Seek fun,
And make nighttime safe.

But... what if he would,
Become withdrawn, reclusive?
No, I would hate that.

Too many decisions.
All have pros but also cons.
This could take a while.

Maybe I will just wait.
Let him decide when the time,
Is right for him alone.

He should know what's best.
But always to me, he is,
My little Eevee.

That's a clever haiku, bobandbill. Good job.

Chainsaw Meowth.........just hilarious. I don't know why, but it is. :cer_laugh:

Eevee is nice, but I believe one thing you are missing is spelling, grammar, and punctuation. Those are important elements in poetry too.

Keep it up!

thank you tjgamer for the compuments

You're welcome.
Keep practicing, learning, and improving, and you'll be a master at Pokémon poetry.

And I voted "Yes, I do" in the voting section.

A few days after reading about pokemon black and white I awoke with a poem in my head. This is almost a prophecy in a way. I know its bad but I wanna see what be think about it. (its probably horrid why do I even bother)

When Guardian of Black
and Guardian of White
meet each other there begins a fight
and a gray horizon is formed
An lo, the end of man is born
only one can stop this destruction
one partner with one imbued with lightning
And there man's destiny is decided
with a battle ending in a clash of lightning

This reminds me of good old Professor Oak. Even though his poems were.... I don't want to say crappy....

The story is pretty nice. Especially since I'm anticipating Pokémon Black and White a lot!
Some capitalization would help make the poem a bit more neat. Also some punctuation.
But since you're obviously a beginner at poetry (are you?) I'll go easy on this one.
Nice work.

Yeah, I'm pretty new to poetry. There was more to the poem but it faded before i could write it down.

I'm gonna try a Pikachu poem I made when I was young but have been trying to improve. (once again I know this is not good)

Pikachu

Oh Pikachu, Mouse of lightning,
You are so determined when you're fighting,
When times are hard you don't surrender:
Oh Pikachu, you're lightning's defender

It's a tad strange, but I actually like this one.
It's a short, warming poem that describes everyone's favorite Pokémon.
Good job!

Lol forgot that, I'll edit it

Deoxys

Oh one who comes from outer space,
In any form you have weird look on face,
Of all the forms you can be,
Speed is the one favored by me

Great structure and style!
It's unusual when a poem states your personal opinion, but I guess there's always a first time.
Keep it up!

Poetry easily comes to me
It floods my mind like a great sea
When a poem comes to my head
I write it quickly, that's all there is to be said.

Also does anyone know the name of the pokemon in Meerfall's signature that looks like a flying squirrel, next to zoroa or however you spell the name.

Heheh. That one was pretty clever.

And unfortunately I don't know that Pokémon's name either. In fact, I don't want to until Black & White are released.
I like things to be a surprise.

Slightly abrasive side note (hope you don't mind or anything):

But in this line shouldn't it be 'you're lightning's defender' instead of your?

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Tip: If you're going to correct someone's grammar, please go all the way to avoid having a line still be grammatically incorrect after your suggestions.

That being said, you're still missing something there. Namely, the line would have to read "you are a lightning defender" to avoid something that sounds like Engrish. "You are lightning defender" doesn't make sense on its own.

Will probably come back to submit an actual review to this thread later.

Also, it's called an Emolga.