Thread: Teezee's Poetry
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Old November 4th, 2011 (7:26 PM). Edited November 12th, 2011 by Snivy063.
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    Wow, I never expected someone to post a review as long as this one! :'o .. Thanks anyway. I'll try to take note to what you've said.

    Anyway, this poem is a poem that I wrote a year ago, so I'm not sure if it's good, but my friend helped me write it. :D
    Spoiler:
    If you could look in my mirror
    You'd see that I'm a monster
    Hiding from the city lights
    In this dark stormy alley
    I thought I held it all
    A gift, this so called "life"
    That's all been washed away
    By the tears in her eyes
    Cascading down the walls
    Once set to protect me
    A prisoner of my own design
    Struggling to break them down
    Being invincible means nothing
    If I can't ever be vulnerable
    To the feelings I once cherished
    The same that I'm now scared of
    A heart that once beat for love
    Has since decayed to dust
    No longer capable of feeling
    The warmth in me is fleeting
    I fine no place to be safe
    I fear what I've found true
    I speak from lips turned blue
    With my last breath I gasp
    "I'll never be you"
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