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Better Late than Never
Hey this is my first fanfic, so before starting the main part of fanfic I thought I would post this intro. It mainly comprises of the three main protagonists 'receiving' their first pokémon, pokéballs and pokédex. Any constructive criticism on my writing style or my story would be greatly appreciated, thanks
Introduction
Our story starts just as the sun was beginning to set in Kanto. A solitary figure was making his way across Route One back home towards Viridian City, the figure was a boy named Ben. Ben was sixteen years old and stood at a little over six foot tall, with an athletic build he had acquired due to his love of sport. His hair was naturally brown but Ben had added blonde highlights to it, and wore it spiked up. Ben was making his way back from Pallet Town, where he had been to wish his friend a happy birthday. He was almost three quarters of the way home, and was quickly becoming bored of the long walk, when suddenly an Ekans shot across the path just a few feet in front of him. This caused Ben to jump, but not as much as what happened next. Just a few seconds later, a Nidoqueen came tearing across the path in hot pursuit of the Ekans. This caused Ben to dive into the grass on the side of the path, to avoid a potentially fatal collision with the rampaging Nidoqueen. He quickly jumped back to his feet and dusted himself down. Looking down a pink coloured egg on the grass nearby caught his eye. Ben immediately recognized it as a pokémon egg, and guessed why the Nidoqueen was chasing the Ekans. The wild Ekans had obviously tried to pinch this egg, but had been caught in the act by Nidoqueen. Ben shot a glance over at the two wild pokémon; Nidoqueen had cornered Ekans and was now bearing down towards the snake threateningly. 'I couldn't, could I?' Ben thought to himself staring longingly at the egg lying on the grass. In one movement Ben stooped down and scooped up the egg before sprinting the remainder of the journey back to Viridian City. 'Hardly the most traditional way of obtaining my first pokemon' Ben thought to himself with a smile, 'But I'll take it!'
As soon as Ben got home, he rang his friend Joe and asked his dad about pokémon eggs, saying it was part of a school project he was doing. Joe's dad was an aide to Professor Oak and knew a lot about pokémon, so was able to tell Ben a lot. Joe's father told Ben that a newly hatched baby pokémon thinks that the first person or pokémon it lays eyes on after hatching is its parent. Excited by this information Ben had carried the egg everywhere with him, determined not to miss the egg hatch. He wasn't going to let this opportunity slip by...
-------------------------------------------------------- a couple of days later -------------------------------------------------------------
James looked out of his window, and saw a red sports car parked outside. He was shocked to see his Uncle Larry step out of it.
"Dad," he yelled, "Uncle Larry's here, and wait 'til you see his new car!"
James leapt up off of the sofa he was sitting on to reveal his well built, 6 foot 6 frame. Despite being so tall and built, James wasn't considered imposing by his friends. He was often referred to as the friendly giant. James had a long fringe and shoulder length brown hair.
"I wonder what he wants?" came James' dads voice, "I guess he's here to apologize for forgetting your birthday on Wednesday."
James' dad wasn't too fond of his brother Larry, because Larry represented the complete opposite of him. While James' dad was an outright professional, Larry lived for the moment and on the edge. He had never been well off before, and James wondered how he had bought a sports car! James let his Uncle in, who enthused at seeing his nephew.
"Jimmy boy! How good to see you," James merely nodded back, he hated being called Jimmy, "You're not still mad I missed your birthday are you?"
James took a deep breath, before smiling and replying, "Of course not, nice car by the way."
"Thanks Jimmy, she's a beaut isn't she," Larry mused looking out at his new car.
"How did you get it Larry?" came a voice from the corridor. Larry looked over and saw his brother in the doorway.
"I'm glad you asked bro," he started, "I had a weekend at Celadon and won big! Hey, that reminds me... Jimmy I've got you a present."
"For me?" asked James surprised. His uncle nodded and took a small parcel out of his pocket. James' heart sank, for a minute he had thought his uncle had bought him something spectacular with his new found wealth. When James unwrapped the present, though, his heart jumped.
"Is this a..." he started.
"That's right your very first pokémon," enthused his Uncle, "Why don't you let your pokémon out and meet him?"
James expanded his new pokéball and released the pokémon inside. There was a blinding flash of light, which shielded James' new pokémon for a second. When the light cleared however, James saw his pokémon in full view. In front of him stood a small brown, dinosaur-like pokémon that wore a skull like a helmet. In his right hand, the pokémon was clutching onto a bone. "Cubone," the pokémon said looking up at its new trainer.
"I know at 16 it may be a little late coming," cam Larry's voice, "but hey, better late than never, right Jimmy?"
James could only nod in agreement, while he looked down at his new pokémon in awe.
-------------------------------------------------------- the next day -------------------------------------------------------------------------
"Joe its James, look I just got given a pokémon by my uncle! He got lucky at the slots and bought me a Cubone out of his winnings! I need you to ask your Dad to get me a pokédex from Professor Oak... Oh and Ben's egg finally hatched, so can you get him one as well?"
Joe couldn't believe it, the three of them had been dreaming for nearly 6 years of getting a pokémon and going on an adventure, and now both Ben and James had got their pokémon at the same time. Joe was the only one left without a pokémon of his own.
"I don't know if Dad will get you one. I mean he's never let me get a pokémon."
"Can you at least try for me?"
Joe agreed to try and get James and Ben pokédex's, but decided against asking his dad. He was in Pallet Town anyway, so he would ask the Professor himself. As he made his way towards the lab he thought about what he would say, then he had a brilliant idea. If the other two were going on a journey, then Joe was going to be joining them. By the time he reached the Professors lab, he had his speech planned out.
He entered and located the Professor. Taking a deep breath he began:
"Professor, could I ask a favour of you?" Joe asked
"Of Course Joe, what is it?" asked the Professor turning around to face Joe.
"It's just that my friend James, do you know James?" the professor nodded so Joe continued, "Well James' uncle won 3 pokémon while he was in Celadon City, and he said James, Ben and I could have them."
"How very generous of him," said Professor Oak.
"Yeah, well I was wondering if you would give us pokédex's to help with our adventure, and if we could use your lab as storage for our extra pokémon?" asked Joe nervously.
"Of course Joe, I can't see that being a problem," said Professor Oak turning around to collect three pokédex's and three trainer ID's, he also handed 15 pokéballs to Joe, five for each of the boys, "Here you go, all you need to become a trainer."
"Thankyou Professor," as he placed all the items in his backpack, "Can you tell my dad where i've gone?"
"Of course Joe," said Professor Oak smiling. Joe thanked the professor and left the lab. Once he stepped outside and rang James, arranging to meet him and Ben in the middle of route One in an hour...
Hey this is my first fanfic, so before starting the main part of fanfic I thought I would post this intro. It mainly comprises of the three main protagonists 'receiving' their first pokémon, pokéballs and pokédex. Any constructive criticism on my writing style or my story would be greatly appreciated, thanks
Introduction
Our story starts just as the sun was beginning to set in Kanto. A solitary figure was making his way across Route One back home towards Viridian City, the figure was a boy named Ben. Ben was sixteen years old and stood at a little over six foot tall, with an athletic build he had acquired due to his love of sport. His hair was naturally brown but Ben had added blonde highlights to it, and wore it spiked up. Ben was making his way back from Pallet Town, where he had been to wish his friend a happy birthday. He was almost three quarters of the way home, and was quickly becoming bored of the long walk, when suddenly an Ekans shot across the path just a few feet in front of him. This caused Ben to jump, but not as much as what happened next. Just a few seconds later, a Nidoqueen came tearing across the path in hot pursuit of the Ekans. This caused Ben to dive into the grass on the side of the path, to avoid a potentially fatal collision with the rampaging Nidoqueen. He quickly jumped back to his feet and dusted himself down. Looking down a pink coloured egg on the grass nearby caught his eye. Ben immediately recognized it as a pokémon egg, and guessed why the Nidoqueen was chasing the Ekans. The wild Ekans had obviously tried to pinch this egg, but had been caught in the act by Nidoqueen. Ben shot a glance over at the two wild pokémon; Nidoqueen had cornered Ekans and was now bearing down towards the snake threateningly. 'I couldn't, could I?' Ben thought to himself staring longingly at the egg lying on the grass. In one movement Ben stooped down and scooped up the egg before sprinting the remainder of the journey back to Viridian City. 'Hardly the most traditional way of obtaining my first pokemon' Ben thought to himself with a smile, 'But I'll take it!'
As soon as Ben got home, he rang his friend Joe and asked his dad about pokémon eggs, saying it was part of a school project he was doing. Joe's dad was an aide to Professor Oak and knew a lot about pokémon, so was able to tell Ben a lot. Joe's father told Ben that a newly hatched baby pokémon thinks that the first person or pokémon it lays eyes on after hatching is its parent. Excited by this information Ben had carried the egg everywhere with him, determined not to miss the egg hatch. He wasn't going to let this opportunity slip by...
-------------------------------------------------------- a couple of days later -------------------------------------------------------------
James looked out of his window, and saw a red sports car parked outside. He was shocked to see his Uncle Larry step out of it.
"Dad," he yelled, "Uncle Larry's here, and wait 'til you see his new car!"
James leapt up off of the sofa he was sitting on to reveal his well built, 6 foot 6 frame. Despite being so tall and built, James wasn't considered imposing by his friends. He was often referred to as the friendly giant. James had a long fringe and shoulder length brown hair.
"I wonder what he wants?" came James' dads voice, "I guess he's here to apologize for forgetting your birthday on Wednesday."
James' dad wasn't too fond of his brother Larry, because Larry represented the complete opposite of him. While James' dad was an outright professional, Larry lived for the moment and on the edge. He had never been well off before, and James wondered how he had bought a sports car! James let his Uncle in, who enthused at seeing his nephew.
"Jimmy boy! How good to see you," James merely nodded back, he hated being called Jimmy, "You're not still mad I missed your birthday are you?"
James took a deep breath, before smiling and replying, "Of course not, nice car by the way."
"Thanks Jimmy, she's a beaut isn't she," Larry mused looking out at his new car.
"How did you get it Larry?" came a voice from the corridor. Larry looked over and saw his brother in the doorway.
"I'm glad you asked bro," he started, "I had a weekend at Celadon and won big! Hey, that reminds me... Jimmy I've got you a present."
"For me?" asked James surprised. His uncle nodded and took a small parcel out of his pocket. James' heart sank, for a minute he had thought his uncle had bought him something spectacular with his new found wealth. When James unwrapped the present, though, his heart jumped.
"Is this a..." he started.
"That's right your very first pokémon," enthused his Uncle, "Why don't you let your pokémon out and meet him?"
James expanded his new pokéball and released the pokémon inside. There was a blinding flash of light, which shielded James' new pokémon for a second. When the light cleared however, James saw his pokémon in full view. In front of him stood a small brown, dinosaur-like pokémon that wore a skull like a helmet. In his right hand, the pokémon was clutching onto a bone. "Cubone," the pokémon said looking up at its new trainer.
"I know at 16 it may be a little late coming," cam Larry's voice, "but hey, better late than never, right Jimmy?"
James could only nod in agreement, while he looked down at his new pokémon in awe.
-------------------------------------------------------- the next day -------------------------------------------------------------------------
"Joe its James, look I just got given a pokémon by my uncle! He got lucky at the slots and bought me a Cubone out of his winnings! I need you to ask your Dad to get me a pokédex from Professor Oak... Oh and Ben's egg finally hatched, so can you get him one as well?"
Joe couldn't believe it, the three of them had been dreaming for nearly 6 years of getting a pokémon and going on an adventure, and now both Ben and James had got their pokémon at the same time. Joe was the only one left without a pokémon of his own.
"I don't know if Dad will get you one. I mean he's never let me get a pokémon."
"Can you at least try for me?"
Joe agreed to try and get James and Ben pokédex's, but decided against asking his dad. He was in Pallet Town anyway, so he would ask the Professor himself. As he made his way towards the lab he thought about what he would say, then he had a brilliant idea. If the other two were going on a journey, then Joe was going to be joining them. By the time he reached the Professors lab, he had his speech planned out.
He entered and located the Professor. Taking a deep breath he began:
"Professor, could I ask a favour of you?" Joe asked
"Of Course Joe, what is it?" asked the Professor turning around to face Joe.
"It's just that my friend James, do you know James?" the professor nodded so Joe continued, "Well James' uncle won 3 pokémon while he was in Celadon City, and he said James, Ben and I could have them."
"How very generous of him," said Professor Oak.
"Yeah, well I was wondering if you would give us pokédex's to help with our adventure, and if we could use your lab as storage for our extra pokémon?" asked Joe nervously.
"Of course Joe, I can't see that being a problem," said Professor Oak turning around to collect three pokédex's and three trainer ID's, he also handed 15 pokéballs to Joe, five for each of the boys, "Here you go, all you need to become a trainer."
"Thankyou Professor," as he placed all the items in his backpack, "Can you tell my dad where i've gone?"
"Of course Joe," said Professor Oak smiling. Joe thanked the professor and left the lab. Once he stepped outside and rang James, arranging to meet him and Ben in the middle of route One in an hour...
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