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Sunk Like Junk (Cha cha cha)

Emmie Em

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    • I don't normally post my writing on sites much, but Klippy said I should post here.. so I am. XD
    All critism will be accepted, and worked through.. but could you keep in mind I write about my feeling and emotions. My writing means a lot to me, and I'd rather you didn't claim it as your own nor keep it and edit it.
    Thanks much <3

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    Klippy

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    • I think it was good, Emily. :3 I liked the repetition of the "It rocked my boat...just stung" stanza. Kept me knowing how you were feeling, even after the second stanza was over. You kept bringing it back to continually let the reader know how you were feeling, because things like: We built it back up. Chugged it along. It's fixed now. It's better. could easily be interpreted as it's completely better, but you're still feeling that feeling of unease.

    So bravo. :3!
     
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