The Meaning Of Life?

The Meaning Of Life?

Is there a meaning for life?
is there a time to be sad
a time to be glad
a time to be mad?
Does every human have their sense of belongingness?
Do we all wish to die
wish to live
wish to suffer
wish to have wealth?
Do we need to have everything we own
or should we be nice and share?

I once asked a man about this
and he said;
Life is for those who only trust it
in themselves and others.

It's a good poem. It's certainly profound. Just reading it makes me want to stare out into space and think about it all. Heh, I do that enought already. xD
Anyways I hope you find that the Muses continue to sing within you.

thanks for your comment. Tis means a lot to me =]

Wow. That is a really good poem. Even though it's short, it looks like you put a lot of effort into it because the words mean a lot! Good job. Looks like you're a natural xD.

Well, it's a good effort.

Some tips though.
One. You need to separate the first stanza into two parts:

Is there a meaning to life?
Is there a time to be sad?
A time to be glad?
A time to be mad?
Does every human have their sense of belongingness?

Do we all wish to die,
Wish to live,
Wish to suffer,
Wish to have wealth?
Do we need to have everything we own,
or should we be nice and share?

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I took out "for" and put "to". "For" isn't the proper word there. Also, capitalization helps.

Next, you could put a bit more effort into finding some rhythm. Yours has some, but when posting a rhyming poem, you should rhythm throughout the stanzas, not rhythm in the beginning, then say other things. It doesn't flow as well. (Though there are poems that do not rhythm, their themes are common throughout and it flows well. If you're going to do this, then work on keeping the flow going.)

yes, i know i repeated a few types of rythmes as i went on. It weird because i thought i put a lot into this poem. I am an expert, i've written poetry forv the past 8 years.

Its weird, i don't put much rhyme into my poems. The next time i'm going to write a poem, its going to be an otimotopeia form (lemme hope i spelled that right xD).

Thats everyone. Your comments will help me go forward to write better poems. Of course, more critisism is excepted =]

~Winner~ said:

The Meaning Of Life?

Is there a meaning for life?
is there a time to be sad
a time to be glad
a time to be mad?
Does every human have their sense of belongingness?
Do we all wish to die
wish to live
wish to suffer
wish to have wealth?
Do we need to have everything we own
or should we be nice and share?

I once asked a man about this
and he said;
Life is for those who only trust it
in themselves and others.

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Wow. That's deep. It is.
Though you might want to work on the rhythm.