Unforgotten

I wrote this when I was in a sorta sh*t mood last night. I think it's kinda stupid, but I'll let you make your own opinion about it.

Ahoj

For the month of February, my review for your piece of creative writing has been preceded with a word from the Czech language. Feel free to be proud, annoyed, or confused by my intent, as I don't really give two cents about what other people think about my peculiarities.

With that said, on to the actual review on this piece of fiction so succinctly termed poetry. The message told within the poem, I felt, was a refreshing view at appreciating life and relationships to the fullest with some scattered, though effective, references towards their transient natures. There's also the constant allusion towards life not being easy and that we're basically just bearing with this gift of life the best we can without complaint. Juxtaposed with your messages on appreciation, it makes for a good balance, and allows your poem to not only tell people to appreciate life better, it also avoids from coming off too cheery, which I find to be a bit nauseating at times, hence my love of realism.

I have to say, though, there was one line in the poem which I found hard to understand. It may have been a metaphor, but that would seem out of place seeing as most of your poem tens to focus on life-events as opposed to allusions. With my limited knowledge of Christianity, I'm thinking it has something to do with baptism, but I'm just taking a wild guess here.

Still, quite a nice poem, and I look forward to seeing any more of your work if you have any.

I think it's pretty great!
Not extraordinarily good, but still very nice. I can't see why you don't like it much.
The style is neat and the patterns of the words are clever.

Keep up the great work!

I am probably just being over-critical of myself as I normally am. I think it's kinda cheesy, but the fact that two people like it, is enough to satisfy me for the moment I gess.

And as the the Baptism thing? I'm not sure I know what line you're talking about. I think you're referring to the crystal cup, and to be honest, that was one of the harder lines to write. I've tried to think of a better line, but crystal cup is basically you drinking wine or something.

I think myself as Christian, but baptism wasn't on my mind when I wrote this.