[Pokémon] By the Skin of His Fangs (Big Bang Collab)

Oh, interesting you have this story in second person pov and I think it works, having the reader as if they're listening to Theo's story. His tale on how he got the fangs and such is cool, don't blame him wanting to stop exploring.

I do notice on ocassion you switch tenses. You use present tense for the most part, when not Theo's dialogue, but you used past tense a couple times. It's pretty minor, though.

As you sit down next to a Croconaw, the first thing you notice are his fangs. Two sparkling incisors jutted from his upper jaw as he threw back an entire pint of frothy beer. His shirt was clean, pressed blue fabric that made his skin appear pale cerulean, and his jeans clung to his legs just tightly enough to display his thick, powerful thighs.

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This paragraph you started using past tese in bold.

Theo slammed down another beer and asked for a water. He drank it all down in one gulp and gestured for another. "That was when the door opened up."

He places his hand on your arm, gently, just enough to pass his warmth into you. You notice that, despite having drank four beers, he's surprisingly clear-headed and steady.

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First paragraph past tense, second paragraph present tense.

But yeah, overall enjoyed this very much and an interesting take on the theme!