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Ash: Master of Them All

Gamedudebt

Pokemon Master
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    My dream is to be the Pokemon Master
    The greatest of them all
    No one will stand in my way
    There's no way I'll ever fall

    My best friend is my Pikachu
    He always walks by my side
    And when I see him in battle
    I start to fill with pride

    And when the night falls
    We sleep together on the ground
    It's peaceful and it's quiet
    There isn't even a sound
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    Aw--you've managed to capture Ash's do-or-die demeanor and his love for Pikachu in just three stanzas--I can see potential for a developed story here, but just to capture them together in a quiet moment works just as well.
     
    I am with EmeraldSky here.
    Describing Ash's urge to be a Pokémon Master was well done.
    Now for some unknown reason, I found the last stanza to be...strange. Maybe because it slightly departs from the rest of the poem's message. But I'm not sure.
    Aside that, excellent job!
     
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