Kyosuke
.·Simple Complexity
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Yes this a a dragonball fan-fic that I wrote that took place a very long time after the GT series, but not too long.
And for those who may have seen this in the past, this is the updated version.
Feedback would be nice to tell me how it is. ^^
Prologue
"Ahhh!!!"
"You?re going to have to do better then that son!"
"Twisting Thunder!!!" The teenage boy screamed.
The small boy struggled and produced a ball of thunder floating above his right hand, and violently threw the thunder ball towards the man who was standing calmly.
He easily swatted it away, and was getting ready to punch the now exhausted child, but stopped just in front of his face.
"You did a good job Shen, you?re really coming along." The man said.
The man who seemed to be of greater strength seemed to be in his 50?s, had wild black hair that went in all directions, and a medium built body. He had lime green wristbands, and was wearing a traditional white Karate uniform, with no sleeves and battered pants. Just by looking at his scared tanned face, you could tell he was a great Sensei.
"Thanks dad... I've been training twice as hard." The young boy said.
The young boy was wearing something similar to his father, but he was wearing a red, battered Karate uniform, with matching wristbands and white bandanna over his forehead. His black hair was sticking upright, and had the face of a true young warrior.
"But your training is lacking endurance, you must train until exhaustion if you even want to think of becoming a great warrior, you should follow the steps of your friend Sakura, she has twice as much strength and doesn?t even have a sensei of her own." His father said.
"Yes dad... from now one I will train even harder." Shen said still very breathless from his last Ki attack.
It was still the middle of the day, and the sun was hidden behind the thick dark rain clouds, the wind was calm and it was perfect for meditation in the sandy desert that they were in.
"Alright now, I'm going to try and teach you a new move, I call it......... the Kamahaha wave, its a energy blast that takes allot of power to pull off but its well worth it when in need." His father said.
"Hmm...." Shen mumbled ready.
"First you have to steady your mind and charge your body with its inner power, just enough to perform this attack, but for you... you might have to power up the best you can."
Shen concentrated then powered up his body, causing the ground to rumble a little.
"Err..." He yelled more while powering up.
"Yes more Shen, you can do it." His dad said.
"Ahh..!!" He yelled even more with his scream raising more after each second. A light grey aura was starting to form around his body.
"What!" His father said in surprise, not knowing his son had so much power.
"Ahhhh!!!!!" Shen screamed more with the ground under him shaking as if it was a earthquake, the dirt under his feet was actually splitting apart!
"Ok I think that?s enough." His dad said.
Shen didn't hear him, and continued to power up even more!
The aura grew even higher, but suddenly he stopped and was struggling to stand up, he collapsed on the soft dirt, due to putting his body in overdrive.
"Heh heh heh... my little warrior... let's go home" His father chuckled, before lifting him up on his back, walking home.
Further away there was some sort of creature standing up on a cliff laughing quietly to itself, but it was too far to see who it was.
Who is this mysterious creature? Find out in the next chapter.....
And for those who may have seen this in the past, this is the updated version.
Feedback would be nice to tell me how it is. ^^
Prologue
"Ahhh!!!"
"You?re going to have to do better then that son!"
"Twisting Thunder!!!" The teenage boy screamed.
The small boy struggled and produced a ball of thunder floating above his right hand, and violently threw the thunder ball towards the man who was standing calmly.
He easily swatted it away, and was getting ready to punch the now exhausted child, but stopped just in front of his face.
"You did a good job Shen, you?re really coming along." The man said.
The man who seemed to be of greater strength seemed to be in his 50?s, had wild black hair that went in all directions, and a medium built body. He had lime green wristbands, and was wearing a traditional white Karate uniform, with no sleeves and battered pants. Just by looking at his scared tanned face, you could tell he was a great Sensei.
"Thanks dad... I've been training twice as hard." The young boy said.
The young boy was wearing something similar to his father, but he was wearing a red, battered Karate uniform, with matching wristbands and white bandanna over his forehead. His black hair was sticking upright, and had the face of a true young warrior.
"But your training is lacking endurance, you must train until exhaustion if you even want to think of becoming a great warrior, you should follow the steps of your friend Sakura, she has twice as much strength and doesn?t even have a sensei of her own." His father said.
"Yes dad... from now one I will train even harder." Shen said still very breathless from his last Ki attack.
It was still the middle of the day, and the sun was hidden behind the thick dark rain clouds, the wind was calm and it was perfect for meditation in the sandy desert that they were in.
"Alright now, I'm going to try and teach you a new move, I call it......... the Kamahaha wave, its a energy blast that takes allot of power to pull off but its well worth it when in need." His father said.
"Hmm...." Shen mumbled ready.
"First you have to steady your mind and charge your body with its inner power, just enough to perform this attack, but for you... you might have to power up the best you can."
Shen concentrated then powered up his body, causing the ground to rumble a little.
"Err..." He yelled more while powering up.
"Yes more Shen, you can do it." His dad said.
"Ahh..!!" He yelled even more with his scream raising more after each second. A light grey aura was starting to form around his body.
"What!" His father said in surprise, not knowing his son had so much power.
"Ahhhh!!!!!" Shen screamed more with the ground under him shaking as if it was a earthquake, the dirt under his feet was actually splitting apart!
"Ok I think that?s enough." His dad said.
Shen didn't hear him, and continued to power up even more!
The aura grew even higher, but suddenly he stopped and was struggling to stand up, he collapsed on the soft dirt, due to putting his body in overdrive.
"Heh heh heh... my little warrior... let's go home" His father chuckled, before lifting him up on his back, walking home.
Further away there was some sort of creature standing up on a cliff laughing quietly to itself, but it was too far to see who it was.
Who is this mysterious creature? Find out in the next chapter.....
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