A Pokemon Poem

My feelings for this poem is quite passive. I like it, but it doesn't really stimulate me at all.
I like the second stanza though. It's keen.
A second part? ...That's up to you.
 
You're getting to be quite the poet!
I bet you didn't even know it?

anyways, keep going. you really are getting pretty good :)
 
When death draws near
I quake with fear
Who knows who'll he take
Which corpse shall he make?

I saw the black hood
Of something that could
Turn me inside-out
Or spin my brains about

It looked at me
with ice cold eyes
Then, I couldn't see
It was my demise....

THE END! @autsy14, thanks a lot for that kind comment. Compare this poem to my first. Has it changed? @TJGAMER, I bet you're going to review this poem and I hope you do. Your talent for writing and reviewing is amazing. See ya!
 
I really liked this one.
A love a poem that tells such a mysterious message, and yet, it is very clear.
 
Well, It's not bad for a beginner, but if you try poems like this you should add a little more rythmn, if you know what I mean.

darkpokeball said:
When death draws near
I quake with fear
Who knows who'll he take
Which corpse shall he make?

I saw the black hood
Of something that could
Turn me inside-out
Or spin my brains about

It looked at me
with ice cold eyes
Then, I couldn't see
It was my demise....

THE END! @autsy14, thanks a lot for that kind comment. Compare this poem to my first. Has it changed? @TJGAMER, I bet you're going to review this poem and I hope you do. Your talent for writing and reviewing is amazing. See ya!
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Oh, hold that thought- this one is really good!
 
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eh.. i think i suk too.. here is an example


The clocks are a'ringing
The song birds are singing
It feels me with boiling rage
As I turn the newspaper page
To find confrontation
Surrounding this nation
Because of stupidity
Enraged by humility
The world is doomed
After anger had bloomed
 
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Well, that one may not be very grand, but it definitely doesn't stink.
 
idk if it is really a poem. but it speaks of Humans being the worlds end.. i'm not gonna post it.. but i have it saved to my computer.. if u wanna hear it.. tell me and i'll PM it to you
 
Hmm...I think I might as well practice a poetry review so pm me the poem, LastOne. Btw, that poem was a heckuva lot better than some of mine(Togepi and Ekans). I can't believe how far I've gotten with this Poetry stuff. I guess, I might as well keep going:

I watched you run
I watched you hide
I pulled out my gun
and survive, you tried

You really tried
You truly failed
Heaven opens wide
As I had you impaled

That's what you get
Now I hope you regret
Killing my friends
Cuz I caused your end

My revenge is complete
And I watch your life retreat
But, now, am I good or bad
Would my friends be sad
Or rather be glad

Did I choose right
Did I choose wrong
Your skin went white
And still I long

To know what would my friends would think
To what I did to you, foul fink
Then you died, before I could blink
And so I walk away slow
Then burst into a run
Faster I go
My battle was won

I decided it was right
I ended my inner plight
As I walk into my car
and drive into the night
 
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