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This is my latest poem that I wrote, comments, reviews, and suggestions please?
No Title Yet:
An all time low,
From an all time high,
These broken wings weren't meant to fly
An island of misery,
In a sea of pain
My feelings for you never waned
Old scars open,
New ones appear
The loss is the deepest wound,
Absence of love the sharpest knife
Has there ever been a time,
In this wretched life on mine
Where you saw my love?
Felt as I've felt?
Loved as I've loved?
Or hurt like I've hurt?
I'm ready to burst,
Filled to the brim with emotions that could never be
Love that will never be returned,
and pain that will scar,
They say time heals all wounds,
But they don't know my love for you
Eh, this ones alright, but I want some advice on how I can make it better,
If you would like to read some of my other writing, I have another thread in this forum somewhere.
No Title Yet:
An all time low,
From an all time high,
These broken wings weren't meant to fly
An island of misery,
In a sea of pain
My feelings for you never waned
Old scars open,
New ones appear
The loss is the deepest wound,
Absence of love the sharpest knife
Has there ever been a time,
In this wretched life on mine
Where you saw my love?
Felt as I've felt?
Loved as I've loved?
Or hurt like I've hurt?
I'm ready to burst,
Filled to the brim with emotions that could never be
Love that will never be returned,
and pain that will scar,
They say time heals all wounds,
But they don't know my love for you
Eh, this ones alright, but I want some advice on how I can make it better,
If you would like to read some of my other writing, I have another thread in this forum somewhere.