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I honestly love this poem, criticizing democracy! XD Nice descriptions, I must say! And I can't really find any errors in this poem, so.. keep it up! ^_^

*This is a really cheap line. Suggestions?

How about...
Right from dusk to dawn ?
I think it can fit in. XD;;
 
In the second law of thermodynamics, all systems eventually wear out or reach a maximum entropy, thus becoming unstable.
Same thing for democracy. And you have described it so well.
If anyone is in great need, he should be aided. For no one's life is less important than anyone else's.

I agree with mervyn797 on a the replacement line.

Sometimes when I try to think of a better line is alter whatever line I try to rhyme with to make it more smooth. But that's just my method. There may be better ones.

Again, good job!
 
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