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Digimon: Absence of Light

Sparx25

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    • Seen Jul 21, 2007
    Prologue

    The boy slipped on his red helmet that matched his crimson armor. He entered the coliseum. Across the battlefield were four others in green, blue, yellow, and brown armor respectively. Beside him stood three warriors in pink, black, and purple armor respectively. They all charged forward, drawing their weapons.

    The red and blue Armored Warriors swords clashed in the center of the field. The crowd cheered. A voice emanated from the red warriors armor." Ray, remember when we were friends?" His opponent's sword lit on fire. "Hiyaah!"
     
    Chapter One

    Suchii sat up, running his hands through his dark, almost black, hair. Off the floor, he grabbed a solid red shirt. He'd slept in his blue jeans. As he walked down the stairs he heard his father talking. "He's got your green eyes and odd hair." Suchii sped up, entering the kitchen before his mother could speak. "Morning Mother, Father. "They greeted him. Suchii quickly ate his scrambled eggs and walked towards the door. "I'm going to Sean's."

    Suchii knocked on the apartment door. Sean opened the door. "Hey."He was wearing a white shirt and blue jeans. Sean had blond hair and blue eyes. "C'mon in." Suchii followed him into Sean's room. Suchii grabbed a controller and pulled out a data disc. Agumon is going to kick Impmon butt.

    Sean laughed and pulled out his own data disc. They put the discs in their handhelds. On the screens were a small dinosaur-type creature and a small purple creature. The purple creature, Impmon, threw a fireball at the dinosaur, Agumon. Agumon backed up after being hit. "Digivolve!" Agumon began to transform.
     
    You're posting terribly brief episodes. First of all I suggest extending them a bit more so you can go for a solid fic. Also you lack character/environment description. The work itself is merely confusing at this point... Take time to lenghten the chapters and apply proper situations as this is directly related to their length.

    The work itself isn't very appealing at this point. Think of this and keep going nevertheless!
     
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