Er... haven't really got a name, but it's a song/poem...

Kylie-chan

Kylie-chan

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    Excuse me for being the worst poet in existence, but here goes...

    (And no, I've never been heartbroken. Luckily. Cos no boy would even want me in the first place to break my heart... *sniffle*
    Pikachu: Shut up, stop feeling sorry for yourself.
    Depression Pikachu: You shut up. It hurts my feelings. Waaahhh! I need a hug!)

    All I know is I'm drowing
    In the tsunami of tears
    All I feel is the ice
    As I fall into the realm of fears

    I'm shattered I'm splattered I'm broken in three
    I'm crying I'm dying I'm screaming to you to, tearing out my hair
    My tears run wild, I'm alone in the darkness
    But it's not like I'd expected you to care

    Oh yeah I'm terrified and lonely,
    I'm trapped, because I let you in
    You sucked me dry like chocolate
    Then threw me like a wrapper in the bin
    I didn't mean anything to you
    I was just a toy for you
    To play with but when it's broken
    It's replaced - my love at least was true
    Maybe you didn't care - but I did

    The rubbish truck overflows
    With all your discarded trash
    Everything you tired of
    Everything you smashed

    I was just a crash test dummy
    I had no feelings, at least that's what you thought
    It's not like I'd be hurt
    When you threw me away, when in your equasion I was nought

    Oh yeah I'm terrified and lonely,
    I'm trapped, because I let you in
    You sucked me dry like chocolate
    Then threw me like a wrapper in the bin
    I didn't mean anything to you
    I was just a toy for you
    To play with but when it's broken
    It's replaced - my love at least was true
    Maybe you didn't care - but I did

    Well, why should I feel pain consuming me
    What did I deserve to do this?
    I blame it on you, it's not fair that you can hypnotise
    With the gentle brush of a kiss

    So what? You're gonna get sick of her
    But I'll never let you back in
    Cause I don't care... I don't care
    Still, it excruciates me within


    BRIDGE:
    So when you throw her away
    Don't expect her to stay
    It doesn't matter anyway
    It doesn't matter anyway
    Why should I feel pain biting inside
    You're just a sleaze who doesn't care
    You didn't listen, your love wasn't there
    So when you want to recycle
    It'll be too late
    Too late
    Too late
    It doesn't matter anyway
     
    O_O

    *sees you making headlights one day*

    That....was....amazing! I wish I could write songs like that! But mine are all about the same topic: Depression xD Great job! PLEASE keep writing more!
     
    Wow thank you.

    Everyone tells me I'm gonna be famous. I personally expected having to post my PLAN B (failure reception):

    *dies* why did I post that?

    PHEW.
     
    wow thats some amazing lines, welldone
    i giv u 4 smilie heads
    :):):)
    hey were did the other one go...........................
    :) <-- tried to escape
     
    lol thanks for all the support
     
    Ooooooooh, I really like this one, DP. I think the flow is pretty good, and I like how you used some original cliches in your song. Good job! =D 9/10

    ~Kelsey
     
    OMG this is SO NICE and VERY VERY GOOD! I just love it! It really touches me bcuz something lik that happened to me. *rates 5* *tears come down*
     
    Original cliches?

    here here don't cry *gives Amanda a tissue* Thanks so much
     
    Yeah, cliche, like.........uuuummmm...oh, here's a bad example XD : "White as Snow" it's just an overused expression. ^_^ But, like I had said, I really do adore your song, very descriptive. ^0~

    ~Kelsey
     
    then how can they be original? that's an oxymoron
     
    *hugs the depressed Pikachu*

    Anyway, that's good, the only lines that don't fit are

    You sucked me dry like chocolate
    Then threw me like a wrapper in the bin

    Because that's specific, kind of, and everything else is... general.... well, you know what I mean... right?
     
    *the depressed Pikachu is now the hyper Pikachu*

    ok that's SPAM... O.o

    thanks for giving me the rep points guys I gained one rep pip in a day
     
    i can't believe i missed this thread >< nice job D_P, i'll look forward to whatever you write next. [puts on D_P fanboi shirt]
    -matt ^_~
     
    aw thanks *pops matt in friends list*

    I'm quite un-depressed thanks to your poetry oh and my birthday... pretty tough if I were to be depressed on my BIRTHDAY...
     
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