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LilyPichu said:
Do you give tutorials of reviewing? XD
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Um... I guess I can. Today or tomorrow? A tutorial on reviewing can't be that long anyway ^_^ I should be able to do it.

Beware though Lily (can I call you that?), following that tutorial will result in a negative 40 reputation in the end. XD
 
XD lol. <Well, duh you can call me that, that's what everyone calls me anywayz. ^_^)

Hm, so you really give it? Can I say tomorrow, since I have an incredible amount of homework to be done in the dead of night? Don't blame me...I was lazy and procrastinated much today. OR if it can arranged through PM, then it would be much appreciated.

Ooh thanks Frost! ^_~

And um, I don't care about those reputation points. All they do is make you look stylish. 8D
 
I know I like it tomorrow better too. I procrasinated a bit as Frosty has once again failed the temptation of real life friends calling on the phone "hey want to play on the internet?" and here is Frosty having a physics test to study for, saying "SURE!" XD;; Ok let's study now >>;

I'll give it tomorrow and stick it in the FAQ section somewhere... and probably by late afternoon/evening it should be up, if homework isn't unusual in amount.
 
I don't mind doing the tutorial. I've got hardly any homework and can get it up before frosty usually. But... yeah... I'll do it.

On another note - the fic overload is kinda getting out of control, I might have to go back to reviewing a couple every day instead of a load on certain days. Any more reviewers would be nice... although I'll probably end up reviewing them on top of the first one XD But I don't mind... after the gaming forums, I'm nearly always here. ^_^
 
Just posted Chapter 6 of my fanfic, A Hero Emerges. Once again, size has forced me to split the chapter into two posts.
 
I guess it's high time. Chapter 9 of Pokemon Neo Destiny is complete. For those of you who haven't read it, give it a shot!!

I will forewarn you. It DOES include the characters from the Anime series. While that may seem to be a weakness, it is also a strength in this situation. The characters are teenagers now, and there is a new story. I will tell you right now that it is different from anything you've EVER seen in the series. Here's my little makeshift Ad for the Fan Fiction.

Thousands of years ago, an evil Pokemon called Asmodia was sealed in the Hoenn Region. When the leader of Team Dark releases this creature, only one group stands between him and global destruction. Join Ash and his buddies as they seek out the Legendary Pokemon to stop this terrible threat. But, will the Legendary Pokemon be enough?? All I can say is, everything else was just practice...
 
In case you haven't noticed, I have posted a new fic called And so it begins...
It is one of your average trainer fics and needs some constructive critiques!
 
@ Ghostly Wings

-"6"... heh I wonder what that could mean? It can't be 6 different evolutions of a family... can it...

-cliched name for a few of them... eeks. But I did like Sonority. The names also predicted the evolution right away, making a few paragraphs something that I just wanted to skim over and get over with. However, it's still a good attempt at foreshadowing.

-the usage of "tumor" was the most terrible choice of wording ever in this fanfic... =/ Be watchful of diction, young lady. Tumor fits terribly to describe an emotion that plays such an important role in the story.

-"brethen"'s connotation is once again, strongly against the connotation that you're looking for... Brethen is usually used to call someone in a fellow religious group, political group (especially communism) or the army. Family members are not brethens.

-enlighten me on this one... I had no idea what's "Melos" possibly alluding to...

-haha... just have to love the last 2 lines.

Final Rating is...

Grammar Basics: 9/10
Plot/Character Basics: 14/20
Tone/Diction: 12/20
Writing Skills: 14/20
Effort/Originality: 25/30
Lit. Device bonus: +4 (narrator's unreliability, foreshadow attempts)

Total: 78

@ Dawn of a New Legacy

-... coincidence or not? This setting reminds me... Dr.Fuji and Ai...

-excellent choice for "pulse" in this chapter... loved it

-watch for incomplete sentences... hope that you corrected this one yourself by now, as this is written awhile ago right?

-oh I was looking forward to some more about Dorian... just sounded a bit incomplete with him suddenly gone, not confirmed if he's alive or dead.

-overall, I think that diction is a lot better than Ghostly Wings... really I did.

Final Rating is...

Grammar Basics: 8/10
Plot/Character Basics: 16/20
Tone/Diction: 15/20
Writing Skills: 15/20
Effort/Originality: 24/30
Lit. Device bonus: +0

Total: 78

(It's a terribly high mark already, especially during this time of the year... so don't complain)

@ So Close Yet so Far Apart (ch.2 and 3)

-changing narrative for no reason will result in MAJOR chaos... how am I suppose to know who's "I" out of nowhere?

-"said" "said" "said" "said" "said" "said" err... that's... how many times did this boring verb get used continously now?

-romance fanfic should *always* focus heavily on character emotions... feel rather rushed in terms of this department for a romance fanfic (notice how at the end the ratings are scaled differently too because of this special trait that romance fanfic shares)

-not sure if using "obnoxious" will be slightly OOC for May... but whatever, as the next paragraph really brings May back on track

-ack... I... seriously disliked highly explicit and direct stuff for emotion/romance fics... =/

-lesser "-ly" adverbs the better, as they're quite annoying and shallow in both denotation and connotation

-err... corny lines alert? " ?I don?t know Ash. The things you read were really private!?

Final Rating is...

Grammar Basics: 7/10
Plot/Character Basics: 14/20
Tone/Diction: 15/25
Writing Skills: 15/25
Effort/Originality: 15/20
Lit. Device bonus: +1 (possible symbolism, but it'll take a few more chapters to develop to earn the "marks" for it, if they aren't ditched away)

Total: 67
 
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To the review of Ghostly WIngs:

Tumor is a bad choice of word? o.o;;; I'm sorry, I hadn't realized that. And thank you for clarifying "brethren" I wasn't totally sure of what it meant. <<;;

As to Dawn of a New Legacy....to answer your question about Dorian..*winks* He plays a MAJOR role in the story, so fear not. His disappearance ties in with the plot.
 
Well, I'd just like to say congrats to LilyPichu, out newest FF Mod, if you didn't realise. BTW, can either Niko or Lileh resticky the guide that had it's name changed when Niko merged it? The rest of it (including my guide) is kinda important to n00bs.

Oh, and for those who've been wondering where I've been in accordance to FF, I've just had a busy weekend that's all. ^_^

W00T - 800th post! XD
 
Hi everyone.

First off, i'd just like to say, over the last week or so, i've gained a newfound respect for those of you who review fics. Frostweaver and Mr Cat Dog, i'm looking at you. (I apologize if I missed any other critics, i'm still sorta new here.)

Anyways, i've taken it upon myself to do some reviews of my own, for the Pokemon Fanfics that come up on the IGN boards.

[url removed - see Rule #1. Though this thread will not be closed]

This is where they've started. Anyway, after experiencing firsthand the time and devotion that this kind of thing requires, well lets just say I appreciate you guys all that much more. Thank you for your time and effort.
 
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Kayoss said:
Hi everyone.

First off, i'd just like to say, over the last week or so, i've gained a newfound respect for those of you who review fics. Frostweaver and Mr Cat Dog, i'm looking at you. (I apologize if I missed any other critics, i'm still sorta new here.)

Anyways, i've taken it upon myself to do some reviews of my own, for the Pokemon Fanfics that come up on the IGN boards.

[url removed - see Rule #1. Though this thread will not be closed]

This is where they've started. Anyway, after experiencing firsthand the time and devotion that this kind of thing requires, well lets just say I appreciate you guys all that much more. Thank you for your time and effort.
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Yay! Another person who appreciates my work! ^_^ But... I should tell you that's frosty's kinda gone. :( Sad, I know, as it means even more fics for me to review. But people like LilyPichu - our newest FF mod, of which I've mentioned already - and Obsidian Blade if she gets round to posting more are also coming here to give top notch reviews in frosty's place.

But... yeah - thanks for the positive comments, and we'll keep reviewing if the people here keep writing. ^_^
 
Mr Cat Dog said:
But people like LilyPichu - our newest FF mod, of which I've mentioned already - and Obsidian Blade if she gets round to posting more are also coming here to give top notch reviews in frosty's place.
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Wow, mentioned on my first day here. O.o Either word gets around fast, or I need to inflate my ego some more. XD

But yeah, I'm here to review (no duh) although length can put me off a fic if it isn't first-class excelent. I have the attention span of a half-dead flea. <<;
 
It's just I've seen some of the reviews you've given on SPPf, and they were pretty long XD So... I figured you'd do some pretty long ones here as well. ^_^ *hands Obsidian a head pump for her ego*
 
Well... I suppose you could call this the FanFic Club, since it is kinda like one with the discussions we've been having. The main point of discussion is for people to advertise and review fics here. Occasionally, it does become like DCC in a way, but it's hasn't been like that for a couple of weeks now. ^_^
 
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