Fat Tony's secret life

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Mr_Plow7

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    Chapter 1 : Steroids

    It all started when i saw a cool pokemon named pikachu, He was training by himself and i went to pet him but he shocked me. I got so pissed i took my bag and in it was Rice crispy and steroids. I ate the whole bottle of steroids and became huge!
    I punched him and beated him up.I used the master ball i stole from proffesor du du head and captured him.

    Chapter 2 : new pokemon


    I went to visit proffesor du du head when he gave me a call about missing master ball. I charged in without asking and told him "what?". Proffesor asked me if i took it and i told him no.
    Proffesor du du head showed me a video footage of me taking it so i got my gun which i stole and shot him. I took all his rare pokemons and ran off.
    I went to see what pokemons he had and it was all garbage except for Fattytron. I stared at him and he made me fat and that was how i was known as Fat Tony the first.

    Chapter 3:Brock

    I ran and I saw this kid named Ash and he was running with a fry pan and i asked him what are you doing with that fry pan?
    He answered me and said " Its for brock, his making me food!:D"
    I told him im following him and we saw brock.
    Ash ran to him and Brock grabbed the pan and beat the crap out of Ash. He was dead and i liked his style, but i saw another body that looked like a hot girl all undressed.
    He saw me and charged to beat me up with the pan so i got my rice crispy and bribed him with it.


    TO BE CONTINUED AS SOON I GET A REVIEW
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    Its...unlike anything I ever saw. Grammer is one thing that should be looked at. And another thing would be characters, your characters are interesting to say the least.

    As to grammar, I'm not an expert but you should try to seperate dialogue and your story apart
     
    I'd have to agree with BigBigMan. Same problems as with Brock's Revenge.

    But still, this is plain weird. FattyTron. O_o Professor Du Du Head. O_o
     
    Hey guys its comedy so camon



    Chapter 4: Elite 4

    So, i went to the pokemon league to ask the elite 4 about legendary pokemon's but the guard said " Leave you fat idiot". Thats when i got so mad i send Pikachu and gave him steroids so he was 10x stronger and i told pikachu to use Thunder and the guard died.
    The Elite 4 told me i wasn't good enough to talk to them so i got my gun and shot him, the second guy was so afraid he gave me his legendary which was suicune.
    I named him maggot and the rest of the elite 4 just left and cried to there momma's, after a while the elite 4 came with there momma's which were only 3 beacause i killed the first guy.
    The grannies grabbed there purse and in it was a gun, they tried to kill me but i summoned pikachu and his steroids helped him survive the bullets. At that time it was time to strike so i got my gun and shot em all.
     
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    Sup viewers, thanks for reading and laughing i know its funny and kinda weird but thats what makes it funny.
    Don't cridisize my work or i will come to ur house and bring fattytron to make you fat as snorlax mom.
    BEWARE
     
    Please do not double post unless you are submitting a new chapter, or are posting relevant information about the story.
     
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    Chapter 5 : Rival

    So i was walking and i saw team rocket eating some rice crispy so i got my pikachu and put a bomb inside his body and made him explode when he went near the team rocket.
    BOOM! the team rocket died and i took there rice crispy and I gave some to my suicune. Just then i saw a police man arresting brock and he had some of my rice crispy and i took it.
    I kept spying and he was in jail now.
    I left and saw Ronald Mc Donald , my rival ever since kid.
    I got my steroids and made my suicune take the whole thing and he became big as steelix! I told suicune to use Blizzard and be froze Ronald and I got my gun and shot at him.
    My rival was finally dead and now my new motto was to kill FattyTron and Proffeser du du head brother , Proffesor Dicky Dick.
     
    Chapter 6: Dialga

    It was a hot day and i saw a strange pokemon come out from nowhere and he ate my rice crispy and thats when i got mad!
    I summoned suicune and made him use all his attacks and it didn't do nothing so I gave him steroids and oviously you know what happens then but he still was too strong.
    I couldnt stand it so i got my nife and cut suicune up and put bombs inside( it isn't regular bombs its nuclear)
    I told dialga to com here and i kicked him so he came charging but i threw suicune and he blew up!
    Instead of dieing he was a freak! A FREAK I TELL YAH he was so ugly he made elite 4 momma's look good.
    So palkia came to recue me but he was no match for freak dialga so i gave palkia some steroids and rice crispy so he became super!



    GUESS WHO THE WINNER WAS??

    A( Freak dialga) B ( Drugged palkia)

    TUNE IN NEXT TIME FOR THE ANSWER
     
    All I can say is...That made me double over with laughter for some reason xD

    Though I must agree with the grammar problem.
     
    Chapter 7: The Winner is?
    I saw drugged palkia and freak dialga in an intence battle and it was almost tied so i got my rice crispy and fead it to palkia and now he was really strong!! Freak dialga used time of crap and made palkia turn into crap and palkia used special fart and poisoned freak dialga. It was really intence and i took my chance and shot dialga BANG BANG BANG and shot once on his ball sack BANG, all i can say is it now depends on palkia alone.
    While dialga was really weak palkia used SUPER DUPER METAL FARTY CLAW and it went through dialga head and cut it off but inside it was acually FATTYTRON my worst enemy or should i say my sworn enemy so i got my gun but it was out of bullets so i was MAD MAD and got my steroids and took it all and beat the crap out of Fattytron but then palkia stopped me and he tried to finish him off but FattyTron made palkia as fat as fat lardo himself and i was wondering why i was talking like a old hill billy on a ramping pie eating contest! Palkia was so fat he couldnt move so all i can do was
    grab his nutsack and cut it off and put bombs in it and blow up FATTY TRON MY ENEMY GRRRR.. I blew him up and cut his face skin of and worn it like a mask and said" BLAH BLAH BLAH I DIED AND LOST TO FAT TONY BLAH BLAH BLAH IM A FATTY "hahahah i said it made me felt better but i still had to kill 2 mor fattytrons in this world to save my anger from exploding like a hillbilly on a turkey wednesday an no refund.
     
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    O....Kay... Well, at least that wasn't very weird... Also, fix your gramar, and make the chapters longer. A lot longer.
     
    Mr Plow, you're slowly improving, but you need to make the chapters longer (at least a page and a half in Microsoft Word?), and you need to fix your grammer if you want to get people to comment on this fan-fiction and like it. You might be a beginner, but read up some fan-fictions in the Fan-fiction of the Month section, and get an idea how a good fan-fiction is when it comes to length, description, grammer, and spelling.
     
    thanks for the tip but this is a short thing and when fat tony's secret life 2 comes out ill make it long and better but this is all comedy 100% and umm yah thx
     
    Chapter 8: Amu nation

    I went to the amu nation to buy bullets for my gun since it was out of bullets but i had no cash on me so i gave the store clerk steroids and rice crispy, for some very strange reason they didnt like rice crispy I WAS IN SUCH A SHOCK I ALMOST HAD A HEART ATTACK but i asked why ? and he replies" It all happened when i was a little boy, hmmm around my 50s i choked on a rice crispy bar and almost died" and i asked him , HOW OLD ARE YOU!!? and he said 52, i was laughing my ass off and threw my steroids at his face!
    He said to me since you likeds my rice crispy death almost story you can have this pack of bullets but all these rice crispy and steroids are mine, i agreed on it. I asked him why he wants rice crispy and he told me to make tasty bullets that will make your enemys tremble in hunger and i could have made billions with that idea so i shot him and left.
    My next plan was to meet Proffesor du du head assistant, proffesor poopy head.



    Please tell me if you thought it was kinda funny .

    To Be Continued
     
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