First Comic

SuperDeoxys

Deoxys RULEZ!
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    My first comic if you cant see words then put it on paint i'll talkl more later right now i'm busy:
    first episode
     
    Err. Good enough, I guess.
    First, don't use photobucket, it resizes your images.
    Don't mix bittages, for FR/LG sprites use FR/LG backgrounds, and not D/P backgrounds. Also, give credit to where you found your sprites, I doubt you created them.
    People can't join comics, it's against the rules here.
    Don't overuse swearing, noone in real life uses sh** in every sentence. As well as read the PC rules, you can't swear period.
    Finally, get better jokes, there's nothing too funny in there.
     
    I think you summed it all up there Astral. I didn't laugh one bit. Remember that if your going to make a joke about somone being '100 kilo's' then make the sprite different.
     
    My friend, you've already thrown yourself in deep with no life jacket. Lines like "if u gt nuffin nice 2 say den SHUT UP" only encourage flamers and hard Critters to come down on you like a locust swarm. The Grammar / Spelling is sadly quite bad, and the whole appearance of the comic needs work. You should really be using speech bubbles, and don;t use such eye burning colours.
     
    Ok sorry it's my first........I'll get better.....
    Edit:And if u have nothing nice to say then dont post.........And i was in a rush that time!
     
    And when I said you can't swear, I mean not in the thread. My bad.
    But use swearing sparingly, it's somewhat frowned upon.
    Sorry for being too harsh.
     
    SuperDeoxys said:
    Ok sorry it's my first........I'll get better.....
    Edit: And if u have nothing nice to say then dont post.........And i was in a rush that time!
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    I don't really understand what you mean by that...
     
    I made the sprite! it took awhile and and paul's sprite i made!

    Immade the sprite it took awhile!
     
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    SuperDeoxys, do not double post. If you have to add something you forgot to mention in your previous posts, please use the Edit button, located in the bottom right corner of you post.
     
    cuttyflam said:
    Its okbut the ash sprite looks messed up just use a diamond and pearl sprite or something.
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    Its because it is an edited sprite, and its in FRLG style, wheras the other sprite is in RSE.

    And heh, you go and find an Ash DP sprite - Very hard Indeed.
     
    Chizzy said:
    Its because it is an edited sprite, and its in FRLG style, wheras the other sprite is in RSE.

    And heh, you go and find an Ash DP sprite - Very hard Indeed.
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    The best thing to do is make one, although that's not the easiest thing in the world.
    Or you can just use FR/LG backgrounds. That would make it blend a bit more. Although not completely.
     
    Yeah, Make your own, thats the best option. Even if it doesn't particulaly look right, post it in the Spriters showcase for help.
     
    ah...um...ah....o-kay...
    about the smallest comic I've EVER seen. Hard to read text,
    Bad humor (Swears used over and over does NOT make humor),
    As said before, NEVER use photobucket- I use Imageshack
    because they don't resize your image, and use text bubbles witch are easier
    to read. And I suggest watching the TV channel "Comedy Central" they have loads of
    material, that you could use. sorry, but I didn't find this comic funny...at all.
     
    It wasn't that funny. But it was OK for a first. And 100 kilos is very unrealistic. I'm assuming Ash in your comic is 10-13 years old. That'd be about 200 pounds. And if you still want him to be hideously overweight, at least make his sprite different.
     
    Achamo said:
    ah...um...ah....o-kay...
    about the smallest comic I've EVER seen. Hard to read text,
    Bad humor (Swears used over and over does NOT make humor),
    As said before, NEVER use photobucket- I use Imageshack
    because they don't resize your image, and use text bubbles witch are easier
    to read. And I suggest watching the TV channel "Comedy Central" they have loads of
    material, that you could use. sorry, but I didn't find this comic funny...at all.
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    I've always used photobucket, and my comics have never lost any quality, whereas Imageshack is plagued with pop ups and lengthly waits.
     
    .:Kaku:. said:
    I've always used photobucket, and my comics have never lost any quality, whereas Imageshack is plagued with pop ups and lengthly waits.
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    yeah, but when I used photobucket when I tried to make my first comic, BUT it was so small, and who cares about popups and a little longer waits? doesn't it matter who well they do it? it works. trust me, my VGcats avatars where always destroied by photobucket- just give me a second and I'll show you some examples.
     
    The text isn't as difficult to read as a few of you assume. Not bad for your first try, but don't be offended by what others tell you, they're only offering you some positive criticism to assist you on improving your comic. Suppose that it's 'something good' to say.
     
    People can't join comics, it's against the rules here.
    Don't overuse swearing, noone in real life uses sh** in every sentence. As well as read the PC rules, you can't swear period.
    Finally, get better jokes, there's nothing too funny in there.
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    I tottally agree there, I thought it had a pointless storyline aswell. But on a positive note, I did enjoy the sprite of Ash.
     
    I quit making this comic and making a new one!
     
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