Friday Breeze

[phantom_zangetsu]

finally after many days of thinking a good poem i finally made 2 this is the first one well i wish you guys would enjoy it:

Friday Breeze
its the same day
the day when i am supossed to smile
but you left me
and there is nothing to be happy about

i sit alone
trying to forget we ever met
every thought of you
a tear falls into my eyes

i have tried to feel okay when i see you
but i just can help
to think that i loved you
and hurt my heart so bad

these memories of you
drifts infront of my face
no matter how i push it away
its still there to stay

i dont want you anymore
but why do you keep on appearing?
the breeze dosent help me forget you
it just helps me to remember you

well like it? heres another one:
Empty Feelings
i feel ashamed of myself
of not doing it too early
now i feel so sad

i just dont like you anymore
the weather pouring down on me
i really feel like an idiot for letting you down
so im really sorry

but i dont like you anymore
my feelings are empty now
you had to say it infront of me
and loose the feelings inside

i never new my mistaks
could lead to this far
i had no idea that i could have this feeling
my heart is broke once again

so now i see you
out on my window
laughing with some friends
feeling like nothing happened

it really hurts inside
when you try to forget
a person so important to you
so improtant that youd die...

i think many people wont like this second one... i know...
i just got the idea from craig david's song "dont love you nomore" it was really cool, that music video

 

[Witch Girl Pilar]

That's cool. A sad poetry. I wonder what's in your mind. BTW, classes gonna start very soon dude... *groan*

 

[phantom_zangetsu]

hey nice avatar! well still on you-know-who! but thanks fo the critics!

 

[Envy]

*Claps hands while crying* OMG,that poem is sooo sad....If I was to rate this I would give it an 100/100!

 

[phantom_zangetsu]

ould go to that far!! lol thanks!!
o, what will becometh of me without thy critics? lol!!!