How I know

[White Christmas Kitsune]

It flows REEEALLY badly. X.x sorry about that. It was midnight when I wrote this soo...>.> Yeah.

How Do I Know

How did I know that you were the one?
I am asked this question every day.
And the answer I give to them
is always the same.

I know by the way you look at me
with a smile that warms my heart;
I lose myself in your eyes
every time you look at me.

I know by the way you talk to me
with a gentle voice and laughter in your eyes
you've never spoken a harsh word to me
and you genuinely care.

I know by the way you hold me
in your loving embrace;
the way your arms encircle me,
your hands upon my waist.

These are the reasons I love you
just as I always will
You're the man I want to marry
And I pray to the Lord that you feel the same way too.


^.^ Please critique! ^.^ Make suggestions on better wording, where I should place punctuation, etc. ^.^

 

[Kyosuke]

Its sort of hard to give constructive critism to a love poem, because its a natural feeling, and your just writing what you feel ^^.

But overall, it was nice poem, you started it with a "hook" and ended in a high note, I say this alot, but nicely done.

 

[Kelsey]

Awwws, Britters, that poem was soo kawaii! I have written numerous love poems in my day. One of them was a duet by Matt and I. It's called "Like A Phoenix". This poem was done nicely. Like LT said, it is difficult to give you advice on this one, seeing as it came from how you feel about Newton5. ^_~

~Kelsey

 

[Elite Four Lance]

The poem is very nice indeed. Nice work. ^^