Sometimes I wonder about recitals. Wouldn't it be more expressive and creative if the student read something THEY wrote?
Anywho, you're a lot better at rhyming than I am. I'm actually kind of fond of the way you wrote it. IMO, it is clear and the concept easily understandable. Although I'm not sure if I should be like "Yeah, don't let it get you down anymore!" or "Did they just suicide?" Second to last line could be interpreted a couple different ways. ^.^
I likeh.