It's a poem! read it!...haha...now

Dakota said:
The Truth
What is pain but a feeling
Love but a thought
Laughter but a speech
That ends up for naught

What is Joy but a premise
A Friend but a corpse
Everything dies
Except for remorse

When you think about life
you'll soon get depressed
of all there is to think
about sin's duress
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I really like this poem -very emotional, especially the first four lines
Your style kinda reminds me of one of my friends john (https://kickmeiamadog.deviantart.com)

Bothered
What I once was the king of all
Now I'm just a lowly nooB
Punched and Beaten
By those I once respected
As friends
good friends
best friends
What once was regarded as funny is now annoying
Cool now stupid
Smart now un-intelligent
What happened? Why did it happen?
The only ones that know the answers to those questions
are the ones that are beating me.
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awws, its really cute..but really funny XD
 
-waves to Dakota- Allo. Your signature is commanding me to "shut up and kiss you" so I shall! -kisses Dakota's cheek- Yay! Okay, okay, on to business.

Your new poem, Bothered, I have a few corrections. In the first verse... The opening word "What" doesn't really fit. I can't catch what you're meaning with it. Unintelligent isn't hyphenated.

I think it's honestly very true... I most definitely miss those days... I really miss the people... Goodness... You're going to make me cry!
 
The last 2 seconds of your life

My feelings bore as all can tell
Into my shell of feeble skin
To enter in is easy now
But to ask how would be a sin

You can't hear the music play
The simple way I hear its tune
But soon, yes soon will be the hour
At which my flowers surround my tomb

And here my life ends with a whisper
A gentle kiss for me to die
Until I fly to heavens door
Forevermore will my heart cry

This isn't even a poem, it's just pretty words put together.
 
Very pretty, Dakota. It is very melodious in a melancholy way, almost manevolent. Yet again though you're commanding us to kiss you! -winks and kisses Dakota- Yay. I really like it. The piece is rather poetic without you meaning to.
 
Meh

Do it now
Don't wait
Don't wait 'till the last second
Don't wait 'till you won't have another chance
Do it now
Don't miss this opportunity
Do it now
It won't happen again
Do it now
You may think you'll have another chance
Are you willing to to risk it?
Do it now
Don't let time take your shot away
Do it now
Kiss me now!!


I had to add that last part :):):)
 
You're killin' me! *kisses Dakota* Stop commanding us to kiss you! ^^
 
I love the last verse of "The last 2 seconds of your life" ^^ prettyful
"Meh" was cute ^^
 
It's so easy to write a poem about "Meh".

MEH
by Jedi_Amara

Meh meh meh
Meh...

Meh.

XD
 
Poem for that special someone

You know who you are
I don't need to point you out
Cause I love you
Not puppy love
Or TV love
The love you would kill for
would die for
And you love me
The meaning of life
Is for you to love me back
So without your love
no, I'm not even gonna think about it
Just the word itself
Love
Doesn't that make your heart just crumble
So kiss me now before I miss you more

Meh, rushed
 
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