~?Jirachi's Dream?~

lilbluecorsola

~¤Sea Priestess¤~
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    "Jirachi..."

    ...

    "Jirachi! Wake up!

    That voice...

    "Jirachi!"

    It sounds so familiar...

    ...

    It's calling to me...


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    "Hey! Jirachi! Come play!"

    The tiny, star-shaped creature blinked and rubbed its eyes, slowly regaining consciousness and awareness of its surroundings. There, through the darkness, its unfocused eyes struggled to discern the distorted figure that had spoken its name.

    A young girl, perhaps no older than the age of ten, emerged into view, smiling warmly at the creature. Arms outstretched, she took it by the hands and pulled the dazed Pok?mon forward, swinging it playfully throughout the air. Her buoyant laughter echoed throughout the black, void-like universe, which seemed to gain more color to match her temperament.

    Golden banners billowed in the sudden rush of wind, and as the creature's confusion cleared at last, it chirped in delight, evidently enjoying the ride. As the world passed in a swirl of shadows, varied hues of the rainbow mixed to form a bright, cheery scene, no longer as bleak and cold as it once was. The girl's feet now danced on emerald grass and trees filtered beams of warm, dappled sunlight drifting towards them from the cerulean sky overhead.

    At last they came to a stop, and as the girl's movements slowed to a halt, she let go of the creature's arms. Dizzily it drifted back down towards the earth, landing gently on the grass, It tottered precariously on one leg before plopping onto its back, disheveled. It heard her clear, childish laughter again, and groggily it raised its head to gaze into her beaming face.

    There were now others standing by her too, leaning over the creature expectantly. Surrounded on all sides by people of varying ages and aspects, each of them shared in common an expression of warmth and friendliness. Strangely, they all felt vaguely familiar in a way to the creature, yet at the same time, distant.

    Shimmering eyes of obsidian drifted to each person, unable to express its sheer ecstasy to see them all again, to be surrounded by companions. Its eyes at last fell upon a small boy stooping beside the girl, peering at the Pok?mon through thick-framed glasses. He was garbed in shorts, and a thick mass of navy blue hair was piled upon his head. The creature's eyes lit up when he saw him, for the sense of familiarity emanating from the boy was stronger then all the others.

    "Hey, Jirachi!" the boy laughed, scooping the Pok?mon up in his arms. Ecstatic, the creature flung its arms around the boy's neck, nearly knocking his glasses askew. He laughed, and returned the embrace.

    The creature sighed and cuddled against the boy lovingly, a feeling of content and elation welling up inside it as it closed its eyes. It all just seemed so perfect...

    But then, slowly, the creature felt itself descending towards the ground once again, gently landing upon the earth. It whimpered and opened its eyes with difficulty, its entire body suddenly growing heavy and tired.

    The boy was now standing above it again, staring down at the creature blankly. He was still smiling, yet something about his expression indicated something wasn't quite right.

    All the others shared the same, rigid expression as they began walking away, almost vanishing into the shadows that once again enveloped the place. And it kept growing colder with each passing second, numbing the creature's body further.

    The Pok?mon gurgled in protest, unable to lift a limb to stop them. It watched, horrified, as one by one, its friends disappeared into the darkness. Aqua teardrops formed at the corners of its eyes, as it watched the girl from earlier leave with the rest of them, waving cheerfully goodbye.

    Desperately, it turned to gaze towards the boy, who had not yet budged. Choking in tears, its shimmering eyes pleaded for him to stay. But the boy only shrugged and smiled, and took a few steps back.

    Shivering, the Pok?mon struggled to stay awake, eyelids drooping against its will. As its vision succumbed to darkness, it watched the boy wave before fading away with the others.

    "Bye Jirachi."

    Sobbing, the Pok?mon lay in the cold, empty space, now void of any other forms of life. Trembling from the frigid cold, it knew there would be no more use in fighting the sleep. Its friends were gone.

    Forever.

    The last, crystal teardrop seeped out from the corner of its eyelid, and fell into the depths of the shadows, as it allowed itself once again to drift into lonely slumber...

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    I lie here in the shadows...

    Waiting for the day...

    When my Dream...

    My Wish...

    Will come True.
     
    Excellent, lilblu! This is quite a touching piece of work. It seems that even though Jirachi can grant all desires, it cannot grant its own... and it has but one wish: to keep its friends for longer than its alotted week. The way this is phrased, Jirachi would give up all its powers to be able to do so... wow.
     
    baby azurill said:
    Excellent, lilblu! This is quite a touching piece of work. It seems that even though Jirachi can grant all desires, it cannot grant its own... and it has but one wish: to keep its friends for longer than its alotted week. The way this is phrased, Jirachi would give up all its powers to be able to do so... wow.

    That's exactly right. (^.^) I've really liked Jirachi a lot ever since I was first introduced to its story, and I enjoy developing it through my own fics. Actually, I've recently thought of a way to incorparate this idea in the new 'Armageddon' series. Hopefully you'll see it soon. X)

    Thanks a lot for reviewing! =D *Supa Lolly*
     
    Sheesh, it took me awhile to get here, now didn't it?
    Yeah, I've always loved the ending to this one, how he meets all these friends and yet, he can never stay with any of them. Again, for the bazillionth time, I really like how well his emotions are portrayed, how easily it is to feel his sadness, his despair...
    *Thinks* Ah, I got it, you get a, "I-get-a-cookie-because-I-have-a-lot-of-one-shots-and-they-rule-all" cooike (yes, all my cokkies have insanely long names.) :3

    ~Chibi~
     
    Chibi Pika said:
    Sheesh, it took me awhile to get here, now didn't it?
    Yeah, I've always loved the ending to this one, how he meets all these friends and yet, he can never stay with any of them. Again, for the bazillionth time, I really like how well his emotions are portrayed, how easily it is to feel his sadness, his despair...
    *Thinks* Ah, I got it, you get a, "I-get-a-cookie-because-I-have-a-lot-of-one-shots-and-they-rule-all" cooike (yes, all my cokkies have insanely long names.) :3

    ~Chibi~

    Whee! =D *tackles Chibi! Thanks so much for reviewing! (Are there any of my fics you haven't reviewed? XD)

    Squee! 8D *huggles her cookie and stores it in a display case*

    *hands a "Supa-Dupa-I-get-a-lolly-because-I-review-all-of-Blue's-One-Shots-and-I-rule" Lolly in return*
     
    Aww, poor Jirachi. This story portrayed sad emotion very well!

    Plot/Originality. Definetely an original and wonderful plot. 1/1

    Description/Detial. I could picture it very clearly! You described the one shot very well 1/1

    Transition. It flowed nicely as well. 1/1

    Grammar/Spelling. No mistakes that I've seen. I'm nto good at noticing, so basically if I notice any mistakes then its a bad thing. 1/1

    Style- I love your style how you manage to portray your emotions so nicely! 1/1

    So your total comes up to 5/5! Thats supercalifragilisticexpialidocious!

    I have to think of SOMETHING that you can do better since as a reviewer I usually point out all the bad things. The only thing I can think of is that the story could be a little bit longer. But everything else was very well written. Your the first 5/5 Ive reviewed in a while
     
    IceKing said:
    Aww, poor Jirachi. This story portrayed sad emotion very well!

    Plot/Originality. Definetely an original and wonderful plot. 1/1

    Description/Detial. I could picture it very clearly! You described the one shot very well 1/1

    Transition. It flowed nicely as well. 1/1

    Grammar/Spelling. No mistakes that I've seen. I'm nto good at noticing, so basically if I notice any mistakes then its a bad thing. 1/1

    Style- I love your style how you manage to portray your emotions so nicely! 1/1

    So your total comes up to 5/5! Thats supercalifragilisticexpialidocious!

    I have to think of SOMETHING that you can do better since as a reviewer I usually point out all the bad things. The only thing I can think of is that the story could be a little bit longer. But everything else was very well written. Your the first 5/5 Ive reviewed in a while

    O.O Really? Wow. I didn't think this fic was all that great. *can't wait to get some more of her better ones here* 8D

    Thanks so much for reviewing! (^.^) *Supa Lolly*
     
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