just a song i wrote today

darkblastoise89

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    i don't know what possesed me to write this, it was just random...

    haven't seen u in a while
    but i wanna let you know
    that i'm feelin your style
    and i won't let u go
    i'll prove myself worth your while
    urs to have and and to hold
    when i hear your name i smile
    are you tuned to my flow?
    'member that time on the tile?
    when we were laying on the flo'
    u said i was such a child,
    but now i really know.

    with your hair in my face,
    your lips pressed to mine
    your hand in my hand,
    do u remember that time?
    it just flsahed across my mind
    as it does every time,
    when you look in my eyes,
    a message so sublime....

    heartbeat poundin' in your chest,
    responding so gently
    to my slightest caress.
    i asked you do u love me,
    you said more or less,
    your mind says no,
    but your heart says yes...
     
    HOLY CHEESE FRIES. I love this one!!!! I think this is one of, if not your best poem/song yet, Matt! *glomps* It has an awsome flow to it, and it really speaks to me, well done, Matt! ^____^

    ~Kelsey
     
    thanks kelsey. it was just something i wrote in class, i just posted it because it fell out my backpack and i saw it XD i'm glad you like it
     
    Oh my, your too good! Seriously! ^^
     
    10/10 thats an awsome song
     
    i'm glad u like it, thankx everyone for rating, this is a part of PC i wish more people would visit, it seems like everyone who visits doesn't post...
     
    Nice! I hope you keep writing! I love to write as well, so yeah, keep going for it!
     
    It's not bad, it flows well and it doesn't have that annoying teenage-angst thing that a lot of 15-year-olds tend to have. (I try to avoid it but it creeps in sometimes...)
     
    That song rocks! It's really good and moving! I love it!
     
    thanx, i didn't really think it was dat good ^ ^; i was just bored so i wrote it in m mathbook@____@ my teacher almost saw it <<; i'm glad u all like it XD
     
    i dk, was i @__@;? half da time i just write random stuff @__@; i just wrote it for the fun of it. that's what i do. i write. thanxs for rating ^ ^
     
    Random stuff? That's what works best I find. I wrote a really random song the other day. It's actually called "Stupid Song". o_O
     
    XD yeah the stuff i write randomly tends to be better than stuff i think about. i dk why, it just is ^ ^
     
    Because that's when you let your creativity flow properly. I'll post some of my stuff here someday...
     
    good point JA and thanx kimi-kaizer, spontaneity usually lets me write for hours, but when i try too hard, it doesn't seem to work dat way
     
    I'm just the same. I guess it's the same for everyone ^^
     
    darkblastoise89 said:
    thanx, i didn't really think it was dat good ^ ^; i was just bored so i wrote it in m mathbook@____@ my teacher almost saw it <<; i'm glad u all like it XD
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    Speaking of math, I can't technically and mathematically review your poetry without going over the possible limit. So meh, be happy with that.

    die math die! eh I'l shut up now

    Also I write my poetry in the hard drive... Mum nearly found it... it's equivalent (ahhhh math has possessed me! j/k)

    I love it. How can you rhyme so well, how do you get that flow? Wow. I have a lot to learn from you.
     
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