Just some random poems...

The poems are quite good.
It would be good if you would have more of a variety between short and long poems but that is just my opinion.
Anyway, keep up the good work.

Superjub :t257:
 
OMG A COMMENT!!! Thanks!!!I'll keep that in mind, here:
Water, Fire, Earth, Air,
They all keep each other's odds fair.

Their power is of all
They could never fall.

Forever they will be,
That's not up to you or me.​
 
thanks, well sad, i can try, they're not really my style though but here it goes...
The darkness falls,
And within the halls,

Sadness rules inside.
It's something from which no one can hide.

Despair fills the surroundings,
It's all puzzling and confounding.

What can you do?
I always ask too.

Good question they say,
But the darkness rules until day.​
 
wow, haven't been on in a while but here it goes...it's a very short one...

Life isn't always a beautiful field,
Sometimes cruel people penetrate your shield.

There will always be at least one way,
That an idiot trys to ruis your day.​
 
Thanks for the feedback, and ok I will!
 
I hope I'm not breaking any rules by posting now, but I've been busy, I suppose if it's necessary and a mod asks, I'll make a new thread but that would suck, lol:Here...
To be defensive,
is sometimes a great offensive.
It teaches you how you must live.
And takes all the patience you can give.

Now and then, it's hard to do.
But I'll do anything, I mean anything for you.
I wish you had a clue,
about the way I feel for you.

Never before have I loved like this,
It's filled with hardships, and it's filled with bliss.
I know, one day, your attention won't miss.
Maybe then, we'll be together, if it fits.

I hope you can accept me.
Then, I'll be filled with glee.
You'll finally find my feelings and you see,
If that's the case, I'll set my feelings free.
​
Now, an explaination is probably required, because I don't usually write this way. As is probably obvious, I like a girl.But much less obvious is the beginning's story, which is, she's currently dating, and I've been very civil to her boyfriend, they don' even know I like her the way I do.
 
This is still on a similar topic as the last poem...yeah...I'm love sick.

You're the only one.
You make me feel as though my life has just begun.
With your love I can finally feel the sun,
But without it, I fear my life is without fun.

The beauty within you,
Controls my dreams about us two.
Like I said, this feeling seems new,
But I would still do near anything for you.

Please open up to me.
Give me a chance and you will see,
I am the one, it is not he,
THe one who quickly stole you from me.​
 
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