Kirozane's Poetry

[Kirozane]

This is just my random poetry, just stuff i wrote that I'm willing to let others see, of course. (I'm sorry if this first one is too.... too bad. I'm not entirely sure myself.

Hooked (Thanks Iceknight212)
(Free verse vent poem)

Acceptance
The knowledge that no matter what
you know where you belong
Family
The ones who "care" for you
"help" you
Allow you to "be yourself"
Friends
the ones who know you
Respect you
To a certain extent:
Love you
Just for who you are
Naturally
Love
Equates to destiny
In the eyes of most
All of these circle
With acceptance in the center
Of the solar system of life
But
What if you're not good enough?
What if who you are is bad?
Then you're ousted
A meteor speeding
Through the dark
Cold
Heartless depths of space
And obviously your loneliness
Is self-inflicted
It has nothing to do
With those who exiled you
Denied the acceptance you want
You crave
You need
Why bother?
To "belong"
YOU need to change
YOU need to be like THEM
Numbed with "medication"
To change who you are
Dulled with "pills"
To be who THEY want you to be
Getting so badly affected
That who you are
Is lost to even you
You turn into what they want
They become happy
Joyful
"Loving"
More accepting of you
But
For what?
Your heart
Your soul
Your INDIVIDUALITY!
You gave it all up!
Just so people could make you
Into what THEY WANT
Was it worth it?
Was it worth losing
What made you
YOU?
It just doesn't matter anymore
Because you bit the poison lure
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What is Poetry?
(Creative writing assignment. Free verse)

A poem is
Emotional
Irrational
Illogical
Short, sweet
And to the point
Or so they say
Muddled imperfection
Pointing in just one direction
The incompletion always leaves you
Wanting
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This one is a random Creative writing assignment. It was fun to write! And it's supposed to cut off at the end. :3

I'm going to do some pokemon based ones soon too! Ones that are less angsty and ranty.

 

[TJgamer]

Honestly, I like the first one better. I absolutely adore it's concept.
True, you may not have formed it very well. But it sure gives a wonderful message.

 

[Kirozane]

Honestly, I like the first one better. I absolutely adore it's concept.
True, you may not have formed it very well. But it sure gives a wonderful message.

Someone agrees with me! :D
So Do you think it needs a different title?

 

[Kirozane]

Aha, I love both of them. I agree with TJ on how the message was put across, and it is a great message, but I love that style. And for a title..? I'd say Hooked is a good one.

As for the one about poetry, The flow is nice, and it does leave me wanting at the end, so all in all, great work Kiro!

Thank you! And I like that title way more, thank you again for that.