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Lackluster Video: A FanFic

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    *Bell Rings*
    Jacques: Hello, welcome to our video store!
    Customer 1: I am enraged! I rented Holes for my children, and I got this... this... THIS PIECE OF CRAP!
    Dominique: No, No, No. You no rent Holes. You rented Moles.
    Customer 1: MOLES!?! Play this sorry excuse for a movie!!
    *Moles plays*
    Customer 1: See!!?! I'm gonna report this to Blockbuster!
    Jacques: We are Lackluster, not Blockbuster...
    Customer 1: Whatever! I'm outta
    *Bell Rings*
    Customer 2: I rented The Lizzie McGuire Movie, and I got this piece of ****! I wanna speak to the manager!
    Dominique: Papi!
    Brigitte ("Papi"): What is it!?!
    Dominique: This woman is mad because she rented the Lizzie McGuire Movie and got a different movie!
    Brigitte: Whaaaatttttt!!!???!!!
    Jacques: No, No, No. You no rent The Lizzie McGuire Movie. You rented The Frizzy McFire Movie!!
    Brigitte: This Movie Better! MUCH BETTER!
    Customer 2: Oh yeah!?! See for yourself!
    *The Frizzy McFire Movie Plays*
    Customer 2: I'm outta here....

    PART 2 COMING SOON
     
    hmmm, I should advice you to use a paragraph form and make it longer.

    Also, please make your story a bit more descriptive and observe the 4 most important elements of writing: PLOT, CHARACTER, CONFLICT and SETTING. (your story lacks 3)
     
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