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I've been reading through most of these poems over the course you have been posting them, but just really couldn't think of anything to say because poetry isn't exactly my forte. However "Stolen Stars" really stood out to me somehow. I think it was because of the last line.
It's just what the poem needed and the perfect ending for it as well. It stands out on its own and the extra gap just makes it stand out even more. It just really struck me. I don't have much of an explanation, but there you go.
I would love to comment on the others, but as I said before I'm still working on poetry, so I really can't think of much to say. Just thought I would drop by, give my two cents, and let you know that there is someone out there reading through these.
An updated version was found in Riddel's notebook days after she passed away, so I guess I could go ahead and post it too. This was the last poem she posted on my forum, but her brother and best friend carried on her work and posted what they found so more will be posted.
And thank you. It really makes me glad someone's reading them.
[Stolen Stars] (Updated version)
Those eyes on me again
I could feel her loving gaze
We make the connection
-My eyes and hers
locked together-
Stunning blues I'd never seen before
And a sparkle so pure and beautiful
That I'd only seen it once before-
Shining in the night's sky
Somehow she had stolen the stars
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To smile is to love
To give a little piece of yourself
And what harm does it do to you?
But oh the joy it brings
To the one who sees your grin
I try to smile
Even when I'm down
After the smile is returned
The darkness of my woe
Is lightened
To smile is to love
To give a little piece of yourself
And what harm does it do to you?
But oh the joy it brings
To the one who sees your grin
I try to smile
Even when I'm down
After the smile is returned
The darkness of my woe
Is lightened